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Feb 16, 2014
Writing Feedback / planting a tree; Young people are more concerned - issues like the environment [5]
i think that essay is good regarding the linguistic structures but it lacks ideas organization
introduction
it lacks a strong opening sentence as well as there is no thesis sentence
Undoubtedly, some issues which is related to environmental, human, and social conflicts require certain degree of awareness side by side to financial welfare. Our previous generations were more concerned about the wellbeing of themselves rather than paying attention to these threats, this essay will cite the fact that new generation has the privilege regarding problems such as global warming, pollution, animal prosperity, international poverty, etc...
hope that was useful
i think that essay is good regarding the linguistic structures but it lacks ideas organization
introduction
it lacks a strong opening sentence as well as there is no thesis sentence
Undoubtedly, some issues which is related to environmental, human, and social conflicts require certain degree of awareness side by side to financial welfare. Our previous generations were more concerned about the wellbeing of themselves rather than paying attention to these threats, this essay will cite the fact that new generation has the privilege regarding problems such as global warming, pollution, animal prosperity, international poverty, etc...
hope that was useful