Writing Feedback / Japanese tourists travelling abroad and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market [5]

The bar chart illustrates the number of Japanese oversea visitors from 1985 to 1995, while the line graph shows the changes of Australia's share occupied by Japan's tourist between 1985 and 1994.

There was an upward trend in the number of Japanese travellers to other countries over the period of 11 years. In 1985, the figure was five million tourists. After this, it rose by approximately a million each year and reach 11 millions in 1990. From 1991 onwards, it continued to increase slightly and peaked at over 15 millions at the end of the period.

Besides, Japan's tourist grew considerably over the period. In 1985, it occupied for 2% of Australia's share then increased dramatically to nearly 5% three years later. Despite a slight fall in 1989,the figure grew by 0.5% each year and ended the period with 6% of total Australia's share.

On the whole, the growth in Japanese oversea travellers matched with the upward trend of Australia's share earned by Japan's tourist. Both figures could increase more from 1995 onwards due to the upward trends of the period.

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Writing Feedback / IELST TASK 1: Australian kids' leisure actives. [5]

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown
The bar chart compares the activities that Australian spend their spare time on, with separation between two genders.
First of all, all the interviewees stated that they enjoyed watching TV or videos the most. Besides, bike riding and playing computer games came as two next favorable choices among children age 5-14, with 80% of boys and 60% of girls falling for each category. Meanwhile, skateboarding and art were not as popular as previous ones.

A more detailed look at the chart shows that there was a difference between the hobbies of two genders. Boys were more likely to outdoor activities as skating or riding, whereas girls preferred creative activities as art and craft. In particular, the figure of girls who chose art and craft was nearly 60%, which doubled that of boys

On the whole, the youngster linked themselves to technological devices most of their leisure time. Also, boys preferred playing outdoors, compared with art hobbies of girls.

Writing Feedback / IELST Task 2: Should people be exempted from taxes? [8]

People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is widely accepted that all citizens have the duty of paying tax to the authorities. However, some people are of the idea that they should be exempted from taxes and earn the right to all their money. Personally I think paying tax is obligatory to every individual.

Basically, the idea of a tax-free country has drawn the interest of few people. First of all, citizens think keeping the money they earned helps improve their life conditions. In other words, the money exempted from tax is useful for upgrading one's house, buying new clothes for kids or having more food for the meals. Another reason is that they do not believe that the tax is spent on appropriate reasons. As an example, the American went string back and asked the money back when the government spent a great deal of the budget on the Iraq war. Hence, keeping the money comes as a safe choice for many people.

On the other hand, others agree that it is everyone's responsibility to pay tax. This is because tax enable the government to process plans and policies that help develop the country. To illustrate, the budgets of national army and governmental system come from tax and these public services are provided to the people. Moreover, paying tax raises the awareness of one's responsibility for the nation. They will be proud if they realize that they are valuable citizens who contribute to the country's development. Finally, tax is considered as a governmental control of the nation's economy. To paraphrase, it helps prevent illegal business links between parties and set the standards for all transactions.

On the whole, I hold the idea that all people are responsible for paying tax to the authorities. To meet with the contrast opinions, the government needs more instructive guides and appropriate policies of the spending that comes from tax. In the mean time, people should aware the merits of a country's contributor.