becky Y
Jan 29, 2014
Undergraduate / 'A challenge only becomes an obstacle when you bow to it' - Essay for UBC [3]
thank you!
thank you!
becky Y
Jan 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl; Childhood is the happiest time of our life (My weakness point is writing) [6]
there are a couple of spelling mistakes, and I don't think you really spend time to write it. It's hard to understand your essay, I'd suggest you to take some tofel training.
there are a couple of spelling mistakes, and I don't think you really spend time to write it. It's hard to understand your essay, I'd suggest you to take some tofel training.
becky Y
Jan 28, 2014
Undergraduate / 'A challenge only becomes an obstacle when you bow to it' - Essay for UBC [3]
Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)I appreciate any comments and feedbacks to improve this essay
A challenge only becomes an obstacle when you bow to it. Taking the challenge is a chance to improve personal quality. I remember back in middle school, there was a speech contest with a great prize. I really wanted to take part in it, but lack of confidence was holding me back. My mom then encouraged me to participate in it, and we prepared the speech together. We went through it many times, and I practiced it days and nights. Finally, the big day came. Even though I have told myself thousands of times that it would be ok, I still felt tense when finally standing on the stage. My palms were covered with stream, and I can even felt that my voice was shaking. Take a deep breath, and beat it. A voice in my heart caught my ear. I then forgot there were hundreds of eyes on me and gave my speech as I was at home. When audiences clapped heartily after my speech, I felt proud that I overcame my lack of confidence.
Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)I appreciate any comments and feedbacks to improve this essay
A challenge only becomes an obstacle when you bow to it. Taking the challenge is a chance to improve personal quality. I remember back in middle school, there was a speech contest with a great prize. I really wanted to take part in it, but lack of confidence was holding me back. My mom then encouraged me to participate in it, and we prepared the speech together. We went through it many times, and I practiced it days and nights. Finally, the big day came. Even though I have told myself thousands of times that it would be ok, I still felt tense when finally standing on the stage. My palms were covered with stream, and I can even felt that my voice was shaking. Take a deep breath, and beat it. A voice in my heart caught my ear. I then forgot there were hundreds of eyes on me and gave my speech as I was at home. When audiences clapped heartily after my speech, I felt proud that I overcame my lack of confidence.