Undergraduate /
Reflections on military Veterans ; UW-Madison [5]
Hello,
I really like ur statement and it made my heart trembling .
This is just my personal opinion...I think there are lots of repetitions of words (like: huge,and, notice...)and information you can simply cut or edit.
For ex: 1)
With my brother in the army, I know that it is a huge sacrifice to join and leave your family and loved ones and dedicate at least four years to this country we have the freedom to call home....i can suggest...
With my brother in the army, I know that it is a huge sacrifice to join and leave the loved ones;to dedicate at least....2) Things like giving that veteran thanks for his
service and sacrifice to our country and
for helping to ensure our our safety, may seem very small, but
significant to that veteran,
huge and significant.3)...any of these things have a
huge considerable impact.
4)I think it is
important a problem of today that, most often,
these such people
orand their acts go unnoticed so that those giving are truly giving from the heart
and out of a desire to give , rather than giving to be
noticed, appreciated, or to get something in return. When
they their deeds are
noticedvisible/evident , it is all the more special to them, to the receiver, and to those observing.
