Writing Feedback / The chart below display skill levels of male and female employees in a British company in [5]

The chart below display skill levels of male and female employees in a British company in 2001. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The pie chart illustates the levels of skillfullness of male and female staff members at a company in British in 2001.
It is clearly that the percentage of male with highly skilled is nearly as twice as the category in female, 31% male with highly skilled is much higher than 16% famale's.

There is no much disparity in skilled part between male workforce and female staff, which are 28% and 32% respectively. The following numbers show that the proportion of skilled male is 4% higher than this female's.

Female wokers dominated in semi-skiiled with 29% while it is only 13% of male staff, lower 6% compare with female.
28% of unskilled male workes, a little bit more than 23% of this category in female, only 5% higher.
On the whole, males are slightly better at skills than females, that was shown in the pie chart by the comparison between 59% and 48%.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1- water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries [3]

the graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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the line graph below illustrates the amount of water was used by 3 sectors Agriculture, Industrial and Domestic.
Based on the graph can be seen that the quantity of water was used for A increased considerably while global water was used by I and D rose more slightly.

The large amount of water was used for A in 1990 and this surge dramatically from 500km3 to around 3,000km3 in 2000. Throughout the period of 100 year, global water use by I and D sectors also increased, but the consumption was minimal until mid-century, from 1950 onward, I use grew steadily just over 1,000km3 in 2000, while D use rose more slowly just only around 300km3. Both far below the level of consumption by A.

The table shows the disparity in the population and irrigated land between 2 countries: Brazil and D.R.C. As a populous country( 176 millions) with a huge irrigated land(26,500km2), the water consumption per person in Brazil is much higher than this in D.R.C. With a spare population and smaller irrigated land than Brazil, the conpsumtion of water per person in D.R.C is lower( 8m3) than in Brazil(359km3).

To sum up, the line graph and the table below show that how high of consumption water can be used in A in some different countries on the world.