Meyfam70
Feb 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : School attendance in the UK in 2007 [7]
I would have written:
The pie chart given elucidates information on reasons why British pupils are absent at school in year 2007. Moreover, there is seven expressed reasons for this case, namely: working parents...
IMPORTANT:
1.Don't use % a lot. Try to use about a third (30%), exact one fourth (25%), one out of ten student (10%), an insignificant proportion (5%) and ...
2. Show your examiner that you can entertain your readers by using a variation of words. for example: instead of repeating UK, yo can use Britain, England,United Kingdom, British students & ...
3.A very personal experience: some words and topics iterate over and over in IELTS writing. Such as: students, tutor, home, resident, region, transportation, woods, governments, vehicles, guns, criminal, sports, food, obesity, university and so much more... . My dear friend, if you really want to write an effective essay LEARN AT LEAST THREE SYNONYM for these extremely common words. Thus avoid repeat words.
4.Here are some useful videos that I've used. I strongly recommend you to watch theme
youtube ==> AcademicEnglishHelp ( for general information and beginners)
dcielts. c o m(useful for upgrading your level)
youtube ==> EnglishRyan ( good tips)
youtube ==> EducationWisdom ( most useful for high score)
5.Keep calm and keep going, practice makes perfect ;)
P.S: for numbers under 10, always write words instead of numbers.
I would have written:
The pie chart given elucidates information on reasons why British pupils are absent at school in year 2007. Moreover, there is seven expressed reasons for this case, namely: working parents...
IMPORTANT:
1.Don't use % a lot. Try to use about a third (30%), exact one fourth (25%), one out of ten student (10%), an insignificant proportion (5%) and ...
2. Show your examiner that you can entertain your readers by using a variation of words. for example: instead of repeating UK, yo can use Britain, England,United Kingdom, British students & ...
3.A very personal experience: some words and topics iterate over and over in IELTS writing. Such as: students, tutor, home, resident, region, transportation, woods, governments, vehicles, guns, criminal, sports, food, obesity, university and so much more... . My dear friend, if you really want to write an effective essay LEARN AT LEAST THREE SYNONYM for these extremely common words. Thus avoid repeat words.
4.Here are some useful videos that I've used. I strongly recommend you to watch theme
youtube ==> AcademicEnglishHelp ( for general information and beginners)
dcielts. c o m(useful for upgrading your level)
youtube ==> EnglishRyan ( good tips)
youtube ==> EducationWisdom ( most useful for high score)
5.Keep calm and keep going, practice makes perfect ;)
P.S: for numbers under 10, always write words instead of numbers.