Writing Feedback / Its Hard to say Goobye [3]

write a narrative essay about a personal experience or memory that haunts you or fascinates you.
(this is what i have so far)

Its painful to say goodbye to someone that you don't want to let go because they mean so much to you and they thought of them leaving is so agonizing. Its never easy and it's probably one of the most challenging experience a person has to face. I remember very vividly the day I had to say goodbye to my grandmother. she had Bowel Cancer, but she never told anyone till about a couple months before she died.

I remember my mom handing me the phone on day she had a look of remorse in her eyes and that confused because i didn't know why she was so upset. I was going to ask but me beat me to it and said that my aunt Angie was on the other line. I didn't ask why so I calmly took the phone from her hands and as i placed my ear to the receiver on the other I could hear her sobbing uncontrollably into the receiver. My heart dropped to the pit of my stomach