Writing Feedback / IELTS : Contacting nowadays seems to be not a difficulty anymore; technology [9]

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Topic : Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a possitive or negative development?

Contacting nowadays seems to be not a difficulty anymore. As technology increased with high awarded, more people use it as their necessary items. Life has changed really different compared to before. If people continues using technologies too much, will it affect to relationships between people and people?

On the one hand, many people said that technologies have bad affects on relationships. It is true that using technologies or the Internet, cell phones, laptops to communicate is fast and convenient but it will become an obstacle between people to people if they abuse? For example, friendships may be faded away if friends just keep in touch through e-mail, skype or chatting by social networks without face-to-face meeting and talking. Moreover, not only technologies affect but also do harm to health because of its electricity. According to a recent research, people around the world used cellphones more and more and may cause tragic deaths because of carlessness.

On the other hand, technology users and aholic-users commented that after using cellphones, laptop, they found OK or even great and more convenient. It is no doubt that the Internet is the most powerful communication nowadays. Thanks to these inventions, contacting and interactions are very easy. If someone wet travel abroad and felt home-sick, no problem caused cause they can call home as anytime they like. It fast, free and convenient. The world today is getting modernized and developed. It is not until cellphones and other contacting devices were invented and itroduced. For example, ín 1990s when cellphones had already invented but they still wrote mails and just use public phones. It is not until 1996 and 1997 that it was advertised so it was used widely.

To sum up, as we can see everthing has 2 faces : coins have 2 sides and also technologies have pros and cons. It depends on how people use and also its qualities, facilities.