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kserc

Apr 13, 2014

Writing Feedback / A Touching Story; a dog that I found when I was 10 years old [6]

Well, everyone else has already spotted and corrected/improved your grammar mistakes. I guess all I can help you with is how to continue the story. My advice, you need to find something that you can relate to and help give you a connection to the story. It doesn't necessarily have to be an animal or a person. However, I suggest you go read about the movie plot in Wikipedia called "Red Dog".

kserc

Apr 12, 2014

Writing Feedback / Soul of American: Integrity and Ethics Essay. [2]

SOUL OF AMERICAN

The soul of being an American; what is it? The answer may be well made in simple manner but the content of its nature is a long bucket list. It is the way we think, rationality, concepts and ideas like that of beauty, or goodness, or health and so on. These are then later simplified into two words. Integrity and ethics.

The word "integrity" is originated from the mathematical word "integer" which means to "be whole and unified" or "to be complete and open". It is a character in a person or what defines person. What is on the inside is shown on the outside. For example, integrity is like an internal system of principles which guides our behaviour. The rewards are intrinsic. Integrity is a choice rather than a duty or commitment. Integrity suggests a sense of wholeness and strength. When we are acting with integrity, we do what is right - even when no one is watching.

On the other hand, we have ethics. Ethics is derived from the Greek word ethos. It was popularized by Aristotle and further developed by latter philosophers. This is an external system of rules. There are rewards when we follow the rules and punishments when we break them. A board or committee often monitors obedience. Many organizations have developed a code of ethics that employees are expected to obey.

Note: Now, I'm not quite sure whether I'm still in topic or am I out of topic? Is there any mistakes I made? This is so frustrating...integrity and ethics. It's not complete yet, this is just the beginning.