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Posts by BRonnie
Name: Brown
Joined: Apr 14, 2014
Last Post: Apr 20, 2014
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From: China
School: iowa

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BRonnie   
Apr 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Enterprises should never put all eggs in one basket - Money in advertising. [3]

In order for a business to succeed, it must put more money in advertising.

It's the highly debated issue whether the enterprisers should put more money in advertising or not, and this topic can approach several angles due to its complexity. While some entrepreneurs believe that only invest more money into advertisements can bring a lot of benefits to enterprises so that the business will succeed, others asserts that the company should spread the risks to put the money not only in advertising but also other aspects such as innovation skills, products research and so on.

Deliberating over the issue, I believe that the enterprises should never put all eggs in one basket; therefore, I would like to show some of my opinions. Indeed, advertising some news like products introducing, sale information and so on can promote company's product or raise company's exposure rates. However, the enterprisers should consider and investigate whether people really interest in advertisements at first because sometimes people don't want to take their time to read or watch the advertisements. Thus, the enterprisers invest a lot of money to advertise on mess medias like television, internet, newspapers and so on is in vain and inefficient ; at the same time, the company will waste their money.

In addition, I think the product quality is the most important thing to both enterprises and customers. Sometimes the advertisements seem to be more exaggerated than practicality. If the people buy and use the products and find that the product is not the same useful as their expectations, people will lose their confidence on the products and even company. Therefore, the company will become negative image in people's hearts. That's why in my opinion, the product quality is the most important; besides, the company should spend money on supervising and researching so that the company can guarantee their products as much useful as people's expectations.

In conclusion, with the reasons mentioned above, I think that the enterprises spend money not only in advertising but also on their researching products and investigating how many people really interest on it. There is a saying " never put all eggs in one basket.
BRonnie   
Apr 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'all processes occur in the water' - Live cycle of a frog [3]

Your essay is really specific. I think it's good.
However, there are some places that you can improve.
1. Try to use "first" "second" "third"..."finally"
2. You use too many "it". "it" who? it's really ambiguity! You should use the concrete words.

The suggestions mentioned above, you can try.
Good Luck !! ^^
BRonnie   
Apr 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : Bricks process [2]

Your essay is really specific. And a lot of concrete verbs. I think it's really good.
However, there are some places that you can improve.
1. I think you should notice the "parallel" if you use conjunctions.
Give you an example:
Another method is to learn from reading materials ,and thento cultivate it as a habit.
2. Try to use "first" "second" "third"..."finally"
3. You use too many short and fragment sentences. You can try to use some sentence patterns.

The suggestions mentioned above, you can try.
Good Luck !! ^^
BRonnie   
Apr 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers; 'they play vital role on children's education' [8]

Traditionally, speaking of being the best teacher, most of people directly think the person must possess professional knowledge, academy and specialty as well as teach at the school. However, the conservative concept ignores that sometimes parents who raise children are the best teacher as well.

Indeed, the school teachers usually accept the college-trained and professional education to become the experts on their research or specialty fields so that most of people regard the school's teachers as the highly qualified intellectuals. In addition, most of parents believe that the highly educated teachers can teach the knowledge to the children and hope their children can be the highly intellectual one day.

However, the rich insights' school teachers easily overlook each student's behavior and personality which may influence students their own learning like distraction because there are so many students in the class that teachers can't take care or notice each child anytime. For this problem, parents play an important role in the process of children learning. First, the teachers don't understand each child's personality so much as parents do so that parents can find more suitable approach to teach and modify their children's deviation behavior patiently. What's more, parents can teach children anytime and anywhere like informal (accidental) learning and giving kinds of lessons by their lives.

In conclusion, although teachers can teach their professions, without modifying students' deviation behavior in time is in vain. Thus, parents plays a vital role on children's education. That's why I agree that parents are the best teacher.
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