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Jun 1, 2009
Poetry / Senses poems: Birthdays, Summer in Yellow [5]

thanks so much ill try to make them better. you guys really saved me because i couldnt figure out what was wrong and now i know :) thanks a bunch
ellabella   
May 30, 2009
Poetry / Senses poems: Birthdays, Summer in Yellow [5]

I have writen 2 senses poems and i need help editing them. could somebody pick which one they like the best and help me to edit it to make it better

the example my teacher gave me is:
Birthdays
Birthdays are red, yellow, and orange
they sound like children laughing
they taste like sugary frosting
Birthdays smell like melting wax and blown out candles
they look like balloons and smiles
Birthdays make people feel special inside

the ones i wrote have no titles yet but i still need help.

Summer is yellow
It sounds like children splashing in water
It tastes like melting icecream
Summer smells like salt water
it looks like families having fun
Summer makes you feel happy

the other one i wrote is about winter

Winter is white and blue
it sounds like teeth chattering
it tastes like hot chocolate
Winter smells like Burning wood
it looks like families getting closer
Winter makes you feel warm and fuzzy inside
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