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mrs rafey   
Apr 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / ielts - Every year several languages die cut; Language as pride of every nation [13]

Every year several languages die cut.some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there were fewer languages in the world :

language death is also known as language extinction or linguicide by linguistics . It is the total eradication of words , phrases , idioms and language as a whole . It is a well known reality that alot of languages get divorced from their native area every year. A very small number of people state that it is not essential to have a huge number of languages rather to attain fewer in amount to live a simple life . I will stand with the viewpoint of linguistics in order to have prestige for each and every language and its life .

language is a gift being given to us by our forefathers . It helps maintain an standard of one's community and blow their name sky high. An example of language contribution is given in the example taken from history. Greek and Latin , the most famous languages . Reminds actual value of language because these languages have devoted hundreds and thousands of terms in medical science and in other professional literatures. By this way , they have given fame to their relevant societies . Still those people are spoken worldly. There is also an impact on social , economic , cultural and political behaviours . This linguicidal act has strong effects on these aspects of a society .we can take example of Nepal .when nepali language got power on the ground and conquered the competition against other languages of the nation . It became dominant in political matters and what happened with other languages . They victimised by impoverishment and suppression . Cultural troubles were also recorded as nepali language and their rituals expanded widely . This discouraged speakers to use their language, and changed and forgot their own language , ultimately. Same muddling of was seen in cultural and social areas of society. These affairs are not area restricted but seen worldwide along with their adverse effects.

After going through the discussion, it is concluded that devaluing of languages is not a matter to be appreciated or ignored .however , it is an issue to get worried on .Otherwise , a number of nations will get threatened .Outcomes of its death is a nightmare to linguistics . Though , they have nothing to do with this but they want shelter of respect and honour for its speakers . No nation can live independently unless it does not have its own pride , its language.
mrs rafey   
Apr 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Ielts: Why people are moving to big cities - social issue [6]

1st para , 2nd sentence "indeed ,Increasing number of people from small cites or rural area choose to move to big cities"

It should be written like this"indeed, increasing number of people from the smaller cities or rural areas have chosen to move to the bigger cites "

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2nd para , 2nd sentence " first of all , there are various means public transportation"

Should be written as "first of all, there are various means of public transportation"

In the third para you have used "first of all " the second time . So , it won't be good in exam dear .

3rd para " Moreover , not only can a big cites provide people with a great chance to develop their skills , but also it offer a wide range of job opportunities while in the countryside this range is limited to a few types of jobs"

You better write it as "Although , big cities provide people with the great chance of skills , they also offer a wide range of job opportunities .whereas, in the countryside , there is a limited scale of a fewer types of jobs"

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mrs rafey   
Apr 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Number of childeren ever born from mother aged 40-45 [6]

The words like overall and while are supporting words so you can use just one in one sentence.
Like in the start you wrote "overall,while the percentage of the number of baby birth varied markedly "

So , you better had to written "overall , the percentage of the number of baby birth varied markedly"
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Nice writing . .carry on . . :)
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