Writing Feedback / Toefl writing; "Can money buy you happiness?" - use money in a proper way [10]

Can money buy happiness? Do you agree or disagree and defend your idea.
Living in this society full of the desire and money. Money not only gives people hope, but also destroy the person. So money is a double-edged sword. Personally, Money can buy people happiness, it just depend how you spend it.

People can use money to Invest in your interests. Doing the things that you do like it, use money to make more convenient. For instance, first time when i go to mountain for skiing. I found it is really hard to control the balance and determine the direction that i want it to go, but when i saw other people enjoy the skiing, making the cool moves, i really envy them. So i spend money to hire an instructor to teach me the basic ski skills. After two-hour course, i feel it's easier to ski down the mountain, and i realize skiing has so much fun.

Money can help people who really need help, then we can get happiness from their smiling faces. One time, School was holding a activity to raise money in order to help the kid in the poor valley. I talked to mum then she gave me 100 $ to do that. After 1 month, we got a video from the valley. They used the money to buy clothes and pencils for the kids who need those stuff indeed. Within the video, they said thank you with a lot smiling faces. I was touching at that moment, i never experience the poor, I just realize money is so useful to them and i'm so glad that i do something for them.

Money can be evil thing if you use it in a wrong way, but when you use money to help other people or invest yourself, then money means a lot to you and you will get your own happiness from it. In a sum, i do think money can bring people happiness.