Writing Feedback / Chart - contribution of selected categories in total spending of five countries [3]

As I'm not very good at writing task 1 so I hope to receive feedback from you . I'm sorry if this bothered you :)

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The chart denotes the contribution of selected categories in total spending of five countries. Housing, transportation and food obviously account for highest proportions.

In United State and Canada, people tend to spend more for Housing and Transportation; around 20% respectively. Food ranked number 2 in list of expenditures sharing in Japan and United Kingdom ; mean while this category only take the 3rd place in Canada and only in this country share of housing and transportation had similar levels. Besides, it's worth noting that in all analyzed countries, health care service and Clothing were not big concerns. The sharing proportion was under 10%, just half of that much in comparison with Housing or transportation.

A detail look at the data reveals that Canadian spent twofold higher for transportation than Japanese, 20% and 10% respectively. While spending for Housing among given countries was nearly the same, the Japanese took the lead in Food category as its sharing expenditure doubled United State.

Writing Feedback / Youth Drug Abuse topic - Causes - effects and possible recommendations [2]

It's widely accepted that modern society has created huge benefits for young people, through a wide range of communication vehicles and infinite information on the internet. However, it's also generated some global issue and many people would take "youth drug abuse" as a typical example. Since this issue is quite serious, deeper analysis about its causes and effects are required to enlighten the situation.

The distinct insight motives behind this action are still debated heatedly among sociologists; however most of them are unanimous in supporting the notion that "Huge expectations from society and family" is the main factor. Many young people admit that they find it's hard to live up to their parents' requirements and feel a sense of hopelessness. Therefore, using drug to them is an effective method to release stress and to re-balance in life. In addition, it's believed that examples set by the elders plays an important role on youth's behavior toward using drugs. Parents who drink and smoke to excess are, in effect, telling their children that drug abuse is acceptable. Consequently, children may have a similar view about illegal drugs, despite the fact that their parents are against their uses.

The effects of drug abuse are well known. First, both physical and mental stability are affected. Loosing concentration ability, self-control is difficult and having sluggish feeling are typical consequences. Second, drug abusers tend to have social problems. Since they got addicted to drugs, hardly can they spend sufficient time for social activities; results in a loose community string and they would be left out afterward.

To fight with this issue, the following recommendations need to be considered. First and foremost, the pressures on young people need to be reduced. Second, the authorities must take drastic measures in controlling the current ubiquitous supply of drugs; more severe policies must be issued in parallel to penalize those suppliers who break the rule. Last but not least, strengthen the communication process to educate young people about the dangers of drug use. All these activities must be taken seriously in an effort to avoid the situation get worse.

Writing Feedback / Essay on OVERPOPULATION topic; 'starvation of millions' [NEW]

Together with environmental related problems, population explosion has drawn a great attention of the public these days. It's believed that this situation creates many negative effects to the stable development of a nation and need to be controlled.

First and foremost, the overpopulation makes a great burden on the infrastructure system; the lack of pure water, insufficient electricity and overladen public transportation are typical consequences caused by this situation. Besides, the environment is also suffered since too many people living on the land could destroy the surrounding natural landscape as well as pollute the air and the underground water. Apparently, all these mentioned outcomes could be observed clearly in poor/developing countries. For instance, New Delhi - one of the most crowded city in the world - is ranked number 9th in the list of top polluted cities worldwide and its citizens are now living in the fear of an unpredictable plague which could outbreak at any time due to the unrecoverable contaminated sources of water.

In addition, the uncontrolled population growth is claimed as the main obstacle for improving the quality of education system, results in a low literacy rate, high unemployment level and a great deal more crime.

There are generally two primary solutions proposed to solve the overpopulation problems. Firstly, every women, who is pregnant, should be legally allowed to have an abortion in case they don't want to give birth (due to some personal reasons). Secondly, the government need to educate people to limit seize of the family. In China, a financial penalty would be applied for those couples who break the "one-child" policy. This policy seems cruel according to some activists however its effectiveness is undeniable in this world most populous nation.

To summarize, it goes without saying that overpopulation is a great threat to the development of a nation. This trend must be restrained in order to avoid starvation of millions people in poor countries and to ensure the basic living standards are satisfied.