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Jun 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay - Well qualified graduates without employement [5]
Fikri thank You very much again :). I was sure that sentence: 'as far as I am concerned' means, in other words 'in my opinion'. So I would be more than happy if You would explain me what is wrong with this sentence.
And thanks TiaDS, You are right, I need to learn some more connectors. By the way, I know it is difficult to mark an essay, but if anyone have got an idea what mark my essay would get on IELTS exam I would be happy to know :)
And conclusion in my essay was: But, I am also convinced that changing students' way of thinking by academic tutors and few government's changes, can bring wonderful affects in the future.
Fikri thank You very much again :). I was sure that sentence: 'as far as I am concerned' means, in other words 'in my opinion'. So I would be more than happy if You would explain me what is wrong with this sentence.
And thanks TiaDS, You are right, I need to learn some more connectors. By the way, I know it is difficult to mark an essay, but if anyone have got an idea what mark my essay would get on IELTS exam I would be happy to know :)
And conclusion in my essay was: But, I am also convinced that changing students' way of thinking by academic tutors and few government's changes, can bring wonderful affects in the future.