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lynn11   
Jun 19, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: As an international tourist, whether adhere to the local custom or not? [8]

lynn11:
travellers should respect the local custom and tradition in the place they are travelling while preserving their own identity.
Is the use of "while" appropriated here??

thank you! i just omit 'they are' after 'while'. would i use this word in this way?

lynn11:
In my perspective, it is recommended that the travellers should respect the local custom and tradition in the place they are travelling while preserving their own identity.
I feel, recommendations should be in the conclusion.

thank you, would i change the 'recommended' with 'reasonable'?
lynn11   
Jun 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: As an international tourist, whether adhere to the local custom or not? [8]

As an international tourist, one should always adhere to the local custom as much as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the frequent communication among people from different regions and cultural background, the exchange of culture and science is bond to be promoted. Here comes an argument that whether one should maintain their own custom or intergrade into the local culture when travelling abroad. In my perspective, it is recommended that the travellers should respect the local custom and tradition in the place they are travelling while preserving their own identity.

The destination of a journey is not only for the view but also to get better comprehension of the local culture and people. Never will a tourist have overall understanding of his target place without experiencing and integrating into the custom and culture. To some degree, some preconceptions and misunderstanding would be eliminated once mutual understanding is deepened between the two sides. Moreover, adherence to the local custom is an effective way to conserve some endangered culture and traditions. In some circumstance, there are limited people inheriting their traditions, so the tourism plays a significant role to preserve the priceless cultural heritage. And the tourism is the key to transfer the culture to a wide range and maintain the culture diversity in the world.

Despite of learning local custom, the tourist should also hold their culture identity. It is a disturbing fact that some countries promote their culture hegemony through tourism, so the travellers should be a qualified culture communicator-absorbing the local culture wisely while spreading their own cultural values to the locals. It is noted that there is not a specified standard to measure different cultures, but it is our responsibility to protect our own culture. This can be best illustrated by the example of westernization. Under the influence of western countries' culture, many people who travel in the western countries tend to copy their culture pattern and replace their own culture with the new one. This behavior is blind and inhibits the sound development of their own culture.

In the light of the facts outlined above, absorbing and following the culture in travelling places and protecting their own cultural identity seems to occupy equal importance for tourists.

Thank you for your advice on the logic and lexical resources!
lynn11   
Jun 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: What are the benefits and problems brought by international corporation? [8]

Thank you for you advice:)
How about this one: Instead of transferring their core departments to the emerging regions, most international corporations prefer shifting their production sectors to the developing countries where the cheap labor force and abundant resources are the most attractive elements.
lynn11   
Jun 16, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: What are the benefits and problems brought by international corporation? [8]

What are the benefits and problems brought by international corporation?

The recent decades have witnessed the prevalence of International Corporation, an indispensible part of a nation's economy constitution. The concerns that the flourish of international business may inhibit the sound development of the local industry have been raised from this phenomenon. In this essay, both the merits and limitations of international cooperation would be discussed.

The advent of multi-national business has brought some opportunities to the countries involved. Whenever an international company launches in a new environment, it has to enroll a plenty of employees, which pose an encouraging signal to elevate the employment rate in a region. Apart from this, it is recognized that the multi-national business stimulates innovation in its sector. In order to win a place during the competition brought by the multi-national company, the local industries have no alternative but to lower their cost and star production innovation. Such benign competition is a motivator to facilitate the development of local industry. Finally, the employees working in multi-national companies are more likely to be exposed in the multi-cultural working atmosphere. Based on the demand of the business, the staff in the multi-national corporations have access to tackle various task concerning different cultural background, which is beneficial for them to expand their outlook and explore their working potentials.

The international corporations, however, pose a threat to the environment and local companies. In most cases, the core department of the international corporation would not be transferred to the emerging regions. On the contrary, it is the production department that is always shifted to the developing countries where where cheap labor force is the most attractive element. This is an effective way to cut down the production cost. Moreover, some multi-national companies change their sites to under developed regions for the sake of the local natural resources, such as water resources, the timbering or even some endangered wild animals. On account of economical interest, the local government has little awareness of environmental conservation and presents attractive condition to the foreign companies. Once the international companies has acquired adequate benefits from the local environment, they are prone to seek another place without shouldering any responsibility to the deteriorated environment.

In the light of the facts outlined above, we should be aware of the pros and cons of multi-national corporations and provide a justified comment on this issue.

Thank you for your advice on the logic of this essay and lexical resource!
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