Writing Feedback / IELTS writing - statistics research of population aged 65 and more [3]

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line chart indicates the proportion of population aged 65 and over in three different countries in different continents.
It is evident from graph that the old people are increasing by time. In recent decades the most of families prefer to have one child ultimately and some of families have no child, so we have to expect that population will become older. It is obvious in graph that in year 1940, the proportion of population aged 65 and more is about 5 till 8 percent in three countries but it is significantly increased in USA and Sweden, and it is gradually decreased in Japan until 1985, then is increased with a high scope.

In conclusion, the proportion of population aged 65 and over will be about 25 percent in these countries,that is the most amount in recent century. We can result that by decreasing of birthing, the young population will be become lower and lower which it is not a suitable factor for a country.

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Writing Feedback / ielts: the chart gives information about UK travel between 1979 and 1999 [3]

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The first chart gives information about travel to and from the UK. The chart shows that between 1979 and 1999, there are most people that have visited out of UK by the UK residents rather than the people that have visited UK by overseas residents. In 1979 the visitors were about 10 millions people and after 1986 this process have increased significantly until 1999 and the biggest difference in amount of people that have visited the UK and UK residents that have visited abroad, related to the year of 1999.

In the second chart we can see the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. It is evident from chart that most of UK residents like to visit the France and Spain and less of them like Turkey for traveling there. The visitors summation of 3 countries of USA, Greece and Turkey have been as amount as Spain, singly.

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