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task 2 for ielts: the wealth sharing among countries always have two sides


Tuti gunner 2 / 2  
Jul 8, 2014   #1
Topic: should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Human society is facing with many problems, especially the rich-poor gap between countries of the third world and the rest of the world. Therefore, many people propose the sharing things such as: food, education form advanced countries to the poor ones while others think that: the poor countries should look after their citizens themselves instead of hoping the supports from others.

Firstly, people of all countries are human beings. So it's very difficult for us to imagine or think that: many fellow creatures are in lack of food and education that are the basic needs for living.

Secondly, if there are not supports from advanced countries, the economic differences between rich and poor countries will become larger and larger. This is the causes of many social international problems such as: war, slavery, illegal immigration. In addition, the helps also will make good relationship between countries. It creates an advantageous condition to develop economy of both countries.

Without doubt, the supports from developed countries are very essential. However, which types of support is the most appropriate to undeveloped ones? If the support is proper, it will be the great factor that stimulates the undeveloped countries to improve their situation. Otherwise, the undeveloped countries can be dependent on the developed ones that can lead to the domination of economy and politic. Thus, the support should stop at providing food, education and health care.

To conclude, the sharing among countries always have two sides. While raising the own sense of initiative to develop country from inner powers, the most important thing is the aided countries have a right policy to use these supports effectively.
sara88fte 2 / 1  
Jul 8, 2014   #2
Firstly, people of all countries are human beings . So it's verydifficult for us to imagine or think that: many fellow creatures are in lack of food and education that are the basic needs for living.

i think too dramatic is better than very difficult
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Jul 25, 2014   #3
Therefore, many people propose the sharing things such as: food, education form advanced countries to the poor ones while others think that

Therefore, many people propose the sharing things such as: food and education form advanced countries to the poor ones while others think that

Firstly, people of all countries are human beings. So it's very difficult for us to imagine or think that: many fellow creatures are in lack of food and education that are the basic needs for living.

try to give more details here
devabe2005 46 / 97  
Aug 9, 2014   #4
Thus, the support should stop at providing food, education and health care. -->

So the needy country should avoid food, education and health care and they should look after themselves.


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