Writing Feedback / IELTS: do animals have the same rights as humans? [6]

The question has asked you to discuss on both the sides. And it seems that you have only included that Humans should take full advantages of Animals.

Writing Feedback / Payment is very vital factor to consider while choose employer [3]

Third paragraph, second line, there is a mistake "innovating jobs are making..." How can your college get paid??? Overall its a good essay.

Undergraduate / NYU Abu Dhabi Essay, Global Network. [6]

How should I start answering NYU Abu Dhabi's supplement?

The question for the supplement is:
Given your NYU campuses of interest - whether they are your primary and alternate home campuses of interest or where you would like to study away while you are a student - where, exactly, would you like to study at NYU - and why?

So, I am really confused regarding how to start my writing? So, could you please help me to write the beginning of the Essay.

And if you want some assistance regarding how to start your application process then please refer to my next thread.