Writing Feedback / It's more important to work at a job you enjoy , even if the salary is low. [4]

Well i put myself 6.0 score, and i will do explain why. Overall your essay is pretty good and expresses fully your ideas; it is clear to catch your way of thinking, and it is important to note that the statements your mentioned are base on your own experience, which enhances your score. To be honest i am not quite fond of your introduction, it seems to common and lacks some strong academic words ( as some parts do). In addition, looking through many essays i've never witnessed intro part startign with "We" :( Moving next, " uninteresting" and "boring" in some way are synonims don't you think? in the sentence "In fact the job covers most of the day and most of the life." it is better to say that it does occupy a large part of our lives.

"to live someone else life" should be to live someone's live. There are some repeations of starting phrases like "in fact". Actually i brefly read your essay and these are notes i noticed (pardon me it the first time i check someone's essay), but your essay undoubtedly deserves 6.0 and there is potential for further development. Good luck!!!