Undergraduate / How it all came to choose the career i want. UC application essay ("personal statement") Prompt #2 [4]

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are.

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Most of us teenagers aren't sure what we want to do with our life, what career we want and how to take the first step to achieve what we want. I started by getting a class called health academy in my sophomore year, in which I don't regret now because now that I'm a senior I have made my choice in what career I want for my future. My experience became really helpful to me, in which it taught me things I wouldn't have known if I didn't take this step. As a health academy student it taught me the world of a doctor, nurse etc. My junior year I was enrolled in job shadowing/internship at a local hospital where I live. My first department was the PCU unit in which I didn't know what to expect my first day nor what it was about. This department showed me how to take care of elderly patients who just got out of surgery and are being taking care of. It wasn't what I expected nor what I wanted to do in the beginning but it's an experience where I learned something new every day and can help me out if I ever decide to do this, in which it gave me somewhat of an experience. The second department I did was Pediatrics, in which I liked a lot. The fact it had to do with kids really made me feel excited about it, I learned how to take care of sick baby's that need assistance more than just going to a doctor, as well as how to inject a baby. This department was something I would look forward to in the future if I decided to do this. My last department was Labor and Delivery. My first day was really excited because I got to experience a birth in which it leaved me speechless. Even though I was only able to be there for 3 days, I had made my decision already that I wanted to become a labor and delivery nurse. This opportunity gave me a once of a life time experience that without being in the health academy I wouldn't have decided the career I wanted. It sure taught me being in a hospital full of cautious every day, where patients come in and out of the door, but taught me stuff I wouldn't have known if I didn't do this experience. This experience make me proud because it showed me I was capable of being in a hospital environment, also that I enjoyed being with kids, especially baby's. But the most important thing is that I was able to decide that I wanted to be a nurse, something it which is not easy but I wouldn't give up because I wanted to prove myself and everyone else I'm capable of achieving my goal, but as well as finishing a career and be successful in life. It relates to the person I am because it shows I want to do something in life, go to a university graduate from there but as well as finish the career I want. Not only has it showed me what I want in life but experience something not many students are able to during high school. It relates to me in many ways but most importantly that I want to be successful person and achieve my own goal in being a nurse and having a good job working at hospital helping out to bring baby's into the world.