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aero_stress

Sep 5, 2016

Writing Feedback / As a result of sport's popularity, the young generation tend to admire famous athletes [3]

Please correct me if I am wrong..Happy learning :)

... and more popular THAN EVER . As a result, the young PEOPLE tend to admire famous ~~sports people~~ athletes.
... professional athletes who ~~have both~~ SUCCEEDin their career and THEY DO HAVE excellent morals AND THEY ARE good examples ...

It takes normal players many years to ...
All those things could encourage TO the young to keep pursuing their passions(Can it be passions?) because it is ...
... Vinh is the first Vietnamese WHO WINS an Olympic gold medal.

HOWEVER, the good behavior of famous athletes ...
... could make them arrogant or EXTRAVAGANCE. THUS, if they are able to stay always ...
... sports competitions can help the youngSTERS TO learn useful lessons.

... love to idealize professional sportsMEN. Therefore, the authorities and parents ~~had better~~ SHOULD encourage children to imitate ATHLETES.

aero_stress

Sep 5, 2016

Writing Feedback / PTE Writing: Computer Technology - we cannot do anything without the help of electronics [2]

In this modern era we cannot do anything without the help of computer technology. Computer technology has increased rapidly over the few decades and now we are totally rely on it. For several reasons, which I will mention below, I completely disagree with this statement.

To begin with, we need to use computer in our every single day. Most of the offices have computers and the every single day they accomplish their works with the help of computers. For example, nowadays people are using internet which is one of the finest invention in the computer technology. People can send email to their bosses, colleagues within a few seconds. Companies are using video conferences in terms of businesses or make any deals. So people do not have to travel to another country just for a discussion.

Furthermore, today medical technology totally rely on computer technology. The doctors cannot prescribe any drugs unless he see patient's medical report. Without the help of computer we cannot get the medical report. For example, doctors use x-ray to diagnosis a patient health condition. Not only that but also few critical operations are conducting with the help of computer technology.

In a nutshell, I do believe computer technology has several disadvantages. But it's advantages outweigh its disadvantages.