Daltos
Oct 2, 2014
Writing Feedback / "How have you contributed to your school" - HELP, Writer's block [2]
Task - "How have you contributed to your school community. Must be at least one page."
I have a personal philosophy in life: If somebody else can do something that I'm doing, they should do it. And what I want to do is find things that would represent a unique contribution to the world - the contribution that only I, and my portfolio of talents, can make happen. Those are my priorities in life.
-Neil deGrasse Tyson
It wasn't until fourth grade when I signed up to be an altar server that I started contributing to my school community. Before then I was just did what I was need and nothing more. I was bad at sports, still bad at sports, and everything else seemed like just extra work without much of a reward, which left me with a lot of free time. But after a couple weeks of altar serving I realized it wouldn't feel as much of a chore as I thought it would and so I looked for something else that I could join. Later they started asking for people to join choir. I didn't have the greatest of singing voices, but I could sing and that's what mattered. At first it was pretty nerve-wrecking having to sing in front of the whole school but the more I sang the more I got used to it.
Later in sixth grade I joined my school's reading olympics team and from December till May read ten books in preparation for the Olympics. Recently though I've begun campaigning for eighth grade student representative.
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I'm not sure how to keep going or expand on it. This is the essay portion of the Neumann Scholarship program, but I'm just struggling to get through it. Whenever I try to keep going I get anxious and nervous and just stop. I'm actually not sure if I'm even going about this the right war. Is this too informal, or generic, or should I go about this in more list-like fashion and describe each "contribution" as if they were vocabulary words and I just had to write down my correlation with this "contribution". Also as for the quote, my idea was to somehow tie it with my opening, but then I felt like that would come off as if I was a tad vain and self-serving.
Also, they never specified a font, or font size so will Arial 12, at 1.5 spacing be alright?
Task - "How have you contributed to your school community. Must be at least one page."
I have a personal philosophy in life: If somebody else can do something that I'm doing, they should do it. And what I want to do is find things that would represent a unique contribution to the world - the contribution that only I, and my portfolio of talents, can make happen. Those are my priorities in life.
-Neil deGrasse Tyson
It wasn't until fourth grade when I signed up to be an altar server that I started contributing to my school community. Before then I was just did what I was need and nothing more. I was bad at sports, still bad at sports, and everything else seemed like just extra work without much of a reward, which left me with a lot of free time. But after a couple weeks of altar serving I realized it wouldn't feel as much of a chore as I thought it would and so I looked for something else that I could join. Later they started asking for people to join choir. I didn't have the greatest of singing voices, but I could sing and that's what mattered. At first it was pretty nerve-wrecking having to sing in front of the whole school but the more I sang the more I got used to it.
Later in sixth grade I joined my school's reading olympics team and from December till May read ten books in preparation for the Olympics. Recently though I've begun campaigning for eighth grade student representative.
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I'm not sure how to keep going or expand on it. This is the essay portion of the Neumann Scholarship program, but I'm just struggling to get through it. Whenever I try to keep going I get anxious and nervous and just stop. I'm actually not sure if I'm even going about this the right war. Is this too informal, or generic, or should I go about this in more list-like fashion and describe each "contribution" as if they were vocabulary words and I just had to write down my correlation with this "contribution". Also as for the quote, my idea was to somehow tie it with my opening, but then I felt like that would come off as if I was a tad vain and self-serving.
Also, they never specified a font, or font size so will Arial 12, at 1.5 spacing be alright?
