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Posts by Vera Canderine
Name: Vân An
Joined: Oct 11, 2014
Last Post: Oct 22, 2014
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Vera Canderine   
Oct 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / Essay: Extra private lessons outside school hours helps do better at school. Disagree or agree? [2]

Give me your comments as they'll be valuable for me :)

Do Private Lessons Improve Student's Grades?



Although attending formal classes at school is always necessary to all kinds of students, there is a question whether they should have extra private lessons? In my opinion, extra private lessons help them do better at school due to the efficiency of learning that they will gain when working alone or in a small group with a teacher.

First of all, extra lessons outside school hours help students practice what they have learnt at an advanced level, which is always the main task of an extra class.As we know, the limited time at a formal class sometimes only allows teachers to give their students the most basic knowledge, not enough for them to pass exams which are more and more difficult.

Secondly, it is easier for teachers to care for each of students working in a small group than at a formal class usually having from 30 to 40 students. In some ways, extra classes create more chance for teachers and students to discuss the unclear matters so as to find the most suitable keys to exercises. The teacher will be the one who can help achieve the best of their students' abilities.

Last but not least, extra private lessons make students usr their learning time in the right way. It is like when we concentrate on something we usually do it best, lessons outside school hours will reduce considerable distraction of students. Moreover, they can also adjust the speed of learning suitably to themselves but not having to skip exercises they don't understand.

Some people say that extra private lessons can waste both students and their families time and money; however, it is only true if they don't learn in a serious way. Vice versa, students should take extra lessons as a way to gain confidence in studying and then perform well at school.
Vera Canderine   
Oct 21, 2014
Writing Feedback / Social networks (Facebook) are harmful: agree vs disagree. [3]

Well, I think the expression "Further and even more importantly" should be replaced by On the other hand. In the first body paragraph, you use " On the one hand", so what is the other hand ??
Vera Canderine   
Oct 16, 2014
Writing Feedback / The problems that Facebook can cause for us. [6]

Really thank you for your help. :'( I know my writing is not good at all, but for this topic I just wrote a para.
By the way can u tell me how I can improve my use of languague in an academic way?
Vera Canderine   
Oct 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / The problems that Facebook can cause for us. [6]

Your comments will help me a lot in learning. Don't hesitate to point out my mistakes, Plz .

Nowsaday when most people know how to use FB, not many of them know exactly what problems can FB cause. First of all, FB diminishes the direct contact among people. In such a high technological century that allows chatting through webcome easily, face to face arrangments become unnecessary. As a result, our relations in real life will soon loosen and break up eventually. Scendly, the abusement of FB can make its users illusive by fake fame.Some people even think themselves very popular because of milliom turns of likes and followers on the Internet although in fact not many people know who they are.Last but not least, the social network like FB is considered to create opportunities for crimes to be committed, for example money tricking, against- government bangs, rape and terrorism, In conclusion, FB will be our waste of time on worthless things if we don't make it function in the way it should.
Vera Canderine   
Oct 11, 2014
Writing Feedback / A letter to a pen friend whom you plan to visit (my IELTS score?) [5]

Well, I [have got] some good news for you, your wish to spend a summer break with me is going to be fulfilled as I [am planning] a trip to England next week.

I think your language is Ok, but the meaning of some sentences is not quite clear.
Anyway, good job. :)
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