Undergraduate / "Plain and Brown" - about a topic of my choice. how my country helped me change [6]

I really like the concept of your essay. Your introduction is very captivating, however, I think that you are asking too many questions. Like the last two sentences should not be questions. The questions that you asked in the beginning are good because it makes the reader think.

Undergraduate / human evolution - Does this essay sound too much like a rant? [7]

yang and everyone here made some very good points. try to make your essay more positive instead of negative, because you are trying to sell yourself (if this is an admission essay).

Undergraduate / Need help with question - news story that will shape my future [11]

Yeah you're right. I read my prompt over and I didn't really say what it has on my future. I am not sure yet if I want to become a doctor or a pharmacist. Pharmacy usually involved studying bacteria and chemicals which is why I chose the story. Do you have any ideas on what I can change to address the prompt? Im not very good with writing short prompts as I tend to babble on and its hard for me to get to the point.

Undergraduate / Need help with question - news story that will shape my future [11]

Thank you all for the suggestions! All of you brought up some really great points. I visited that website you gave me Sean and found a really interesting article that I wrote about. I would also like to thank Rolandj727 and Simone for bringing up some really insightful topics to write about. However I had already finished my paragraph when I saw your posts. Anyways, here is what I came up with last night:

"I came across an article a few days ago highlighting a recent breakthrough in science. The article was titled "Israeli scientists show bacteria can plan ahead" and was published on June 17, 2009 on esciencenews.com. It described the new research conducted by Weizmann Institute of Science where they discovered that bacteria are able to foresee any future event and prepare for it. A professor at Tel Aviv University and two doctoral students examined microorganisms that lived in environments that changed in predictable ways. They discovered that the microorganisms were able to anticipate what comes next in a sequence of events and then change their state of affairs accordingly. I feel that these findings in science open the doors for many young and aspiring doctors who wish to pursue a career in medicine. It shows the potential that one has to research and learn new things."

Waht do you think?