Undergraduate / "The road that lead me to Brandeis University", Originally [4]

"You cannot create experience, you must undergo it."---Albert Camus
Losing my way in transverse lists of data and descriptions, I set my mind to pay a visit to the colleges I was interested in. There was a name on the fifth row of the school visit list, which I remember clearly till now because of the splendor I experienced there---Brandeis.

Waltham first greeted me with a brace when I lost my way few miles from the college. "My car is over there. Would you like to take my car to there?" I gain a free ride from a friendly man when I was asking for the way to school. The amity and serenity amazed me.

The touch with Brandeis University was solemn with conciseness. Leading us through the school, the guide impressed us with the school's serious and precise style. Looking into the classroom, I can saw students dedicated themselves to the research. Walking through the dorm, I can hear happy laughter in the room. In the journey, a smile always hung from the student guide 's face and a sense of proud was exuded from his words. The air of humanity encircled the school even each of its corner.

It was past twelve o'clock when we finished the tour, but the admission officers were still waiting to answer our questions. I could feel their respect for the prospective students from their great patience.

"Top notch education, humanistic care and beloved friendship in Brandeis University." Automatically, I noted the name "Brandeis" onto the top of the list on the train to Boston.

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