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Name: Imtiaz Ahasan
Joined: Oct 22, 2014
Last Post: Oct 25, 2014
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From: Bangladesh
School: Dhaka city college

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imon   
Oct 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: people are now more conscious to gain more educational qualification [3]

Hi Katy, Thanks a lot. Actually it's from Cambridge-01, test-04. They never used to define precisely if that's an argument or opinion essay, that's why I didn't follow any pattern. But recent cambridge practice books clearly define what type of essay we should write. Thanks again.
imon   
Oct 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: people are now more conscious to gain more educational qualification [3]

The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

The career itself became the motto of living since the beginning of industrialization in the late 19th century. People usually tend to have a single career as a means of living. However, a modern trend reveals that new generations are more interested to perform several jobs and also would like to gain multiple higher educational certificates in order to earn more and to gain financial security.

A full time job with a steady income was enough for a potential employee to support himself and his family. But with the recent recession, almost all the countries all over the world are seeing significant economic downfall. This overwhelming crisis is prompting delayering and reduction of workers. As a result, people are focusing on doing several jobs or gaining further qualification to secure their economic condition.

Moreover, the arrival of technology has also been playing a major role promoting further unemployment. The official term of it is named "Technological Unemployment". North American economists have published reports after scrutinizing the recent American economic situation that, technology is eliminating more jobs than creating one. For example, robots, automation and softwares are taking over manual human workers professions such as clerks, interpreters, security services, retails and specially in manufacturing companies. Thus many people's jobs are now at high stake. The best way to ensure a flexible earning is getting more jobs. Last but not least, corporational policy to to pay less to inferiors is another reason that drives labours to work on different sectors.

For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that people are now more conscious to gain more educational qualification and also are more interested to work on various fields simultaneously to earn more and support themselves.
imon   
Oct 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Modern forms of communication increases the frequency and quality of interpersonal links [3]

Technological advance (advancement) affects significantly in the horizon of human life

As a universal , electronic messaging and email transmute social life of inhabitants .

In the previous era (past) , the way people (used to) communicate (with) one another is (was) by sending a letter

They need (had) to wait for getting (a) message respond (response) for several days

Hi sorry but you've made slight mistakes almost in every sentences, can't correct all of them. This will reduce your score. First focus on how to make flawless sentence.

Good luck
imon   
Oct 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / It is believed by many that women should decide whether to have an offspring or not [4]

"Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up"

It is believed by many that women should decide whether to have an offspring or not. Thus it raises the concept that it is also only her responsibility to raise them properly. But in my opinion, in order to look after the infants, both father and mother should work together to bond a healthy and stable family.

First and foremost, we need to define what a family is. A family is just like any institution that is formed by a husband and a wife to raise up their next generation. It has it's own constitution although it may vary from families to families. Any crucial decision for the family should be made by both parents. Firstly, having a children is one of the most important factors a family may consider. It is both father's and mother's duty to take care of the youngster well as providing them value, morality and ethics. The child also need supports from economic and social perspective. However, a family could be split up because of divorce, demise of either one or both of the parents or for career reasons. As a result, they tend to grow up under a single mother or father or by other family members. Except these conditions, a father is just as important as mother to the family.

Secondly, children need both their parents financial and emotional support. Absence or less care by any parent may hamper the children's physical and mental growth. A recent research by American economists suggested that, infants with a single parent or no parent have a higher risk of juvenile delinquency. Lack of a healthy and stable life may also drive them to commit serious crimes in later life. On the other hand, kids from a happy and healthy family tend to do better in school, college and are most likely to have a successful life. Last but not least, some other factors also play an important role that leads women to believe having a children is only their responsibility such as, social, cultural, political, economical and religious factors.

For the reasons mentioned above, it is clear that a child needs both parent to have a better life near future. That's why, it is not only mother's decision and responsibility but also fatheer's role is not avoidable at all.

(Please check if I've wrote something irrelevant or focused on family/children rather than on fatherhood/motherhood. Also give a score please. Thanks in advance.)
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