Tiny Tiger
Nov 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / Write an essay that either supports or opposes the use of cell phones. [7]
You are welcome. I am a heavy cellphones user.
You are welcome. I am a heavy cellphones user.
Tiny Tiger
Nov 9, 2014
Undergraduate / I take pride in everything the soccer game has been able to give me - UC Essay [5]
I would recommend you to rethink.
You have mentioned a talent, i.e. playing soccer, but are not exactly illustrating any great event related to learnings from soccer.
You have also mentioned a personal quality of reluctance. You may use your essay to stress how soccer has turned you into an optimist from being pessimistic previously.
In general, rewrite giving an example of another achievement (to answer the "What about this" part of the question), which resulted from the things you have learnt (like you have mentioned) by playing soccer.
I would recommend you to rethink.
You have mentioned a talent, i.e. playing soccer, but are not exactly illustrating any great event related to learnings from soccer.
You have also mentioned a personal quality of reluctance. You may use your essay to stress how soccer has turned you into an optimist from being pessimistic previously.
In general, rewrite giving an example of another achievement (to answer the "What about this" part of the question), which resulted from the things you have learnt (like you have mentioned) by playing soccer.
Tiny Tiger
Nov 8, 2014
Writing Feedback / Write an essay that either supports or opposes the use of cell phones. [7]
Cellphones, contemporarily known as Smartphones, are so-called because of the mini-computing experience it provides to its users, which goes beyond simple calling and texting application. To begin with, by using appropriate software applications it can be used for performance enchancement like planning, scheduling and organising tasks. The single device can be used for entertainment too, i.e. listening to music, watching videos or playing virtual games. It comes handy for people who frequently send and receive e-mails or are actively involved in social networking, as these activities can be conviently done even when on the go. Getting directions to new places or when lost is possible using its navigation functionality assisted by the GPS. Connecting to the world wide web doesn't require bulky devices anymore and all functions from reading daily news to online shopping can be easily done using it. Most importantly, one can avoid carrying cameras for capturing random candid moments because even this is done by it with high image quality. Thus, I recommend the use of cellphones because of its versatility, inspite of being a pocket-sized device.
Cellphones, contemporarily known as Smartphones, are so-called because of the mini-computing experience it provides to its users, which goes beyond simple calling and texting application. To begin with, by using appropriate software applications it can be used for performance enchancement like planning, scheduling and organising tasks. The single device can be used for entertainment too, i.e. listening to music, watching videos or playing virtual games. It comes handy for people who frequently send and receive e-mails or are actively involved in social networking, as these activities can be conviently done even when on the go. Getting directions to new places or when lost is possible using its navigation functionality assisted by the GPS. Connecting to the world wide web doesn't require bulky devices anymore and all functions from reading daily news to online shopping can be easily done using it. Most importantly, one can avoid carrying cameras for capturing random candid moments because even this is done by it with high image quality. Thus, I recommend the use of cellphones because of its versatility, inspite of being a pocket-sized device.
