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Write an essay that either supports or opposes the use of cell phones.


jk98 1 / 2  
Nov 8, 2014   #1
1.Write an 8 sentence essay that either supports or opposes the use of cell phones.

I believe that cell phones have many assets. First of all, cell phones have particularly every service that people demand. For example, cell phones these days can take very high quality photo shoots and can be shared with other people through the SNS. Second, cell phones grant people access to the Internet. This enables users to work without a computer or laptop. Finally, cell phones can help people connect with one another. In addition, through satellites people can call each other everywhere, wherever they are. For the reasons above, I recommend using cell phones.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 8, 2014   #2
I cleaned up your essay and brought it down to a 6 sentence count. I hope it works for you :-)

I believe that cell phones have many assets. First of all, cell phones have particularly every service that people demand. For example, cell phones these days can take very high quality photo shoots and can be shared with other people through the SNS. Second, cell phones grant people access to the Internet. This enables users to work without a computer or laptop. Finally, cell phones can help people connect with one another. In addition, through satellites people can call each other everywhere, wherever they are. For the reasons above, I recommend using cell phones.

- I believe that cellphones have many positive uses that we all benefit from. First of all, it contains all of the applications that we need in order to function in daily life. Everything from the calendar of activities to our most frequently called numbers are contained in this palm sized device. It is our still and video camera, and houses hours of our unforgettable memories for instant reference. It is our computer when our tablet and laptops fail us. It keeps us better connected with one another in our digital world and ensures the continuation of our smooth social and family relationships because of its ability to help us communicate in multimedia forms with one another.
OP jk98 1 / 2  
Nov 8, 2014   #3
Thanks! But its supposed to be a 8 sentence essay.Anyway thanks again!
Tiny Tiger - / 3 2  
Nov 8, 2014   #4
Cellphones, contemporarily known as Smartphones, are so-called because of the mini-computing experience it provides to its users, which goes beyond simple calling and texting application. To begin with, by using appropriate software applications it can be used for performance enchancement like planning, scheduling and organising tasks. The single device can be used for entertainment too, i.e. listening to music, watching videos or playing virtual games. It comes handy for people who frequently send and receive e-mails or are actively involved in social networking, as these activities can be conviently done even when on the go. Getting directions to new places or when lost is possible using its navigation functionality assisted by the GPS. Connecting to the world wide web doesn't require bulky devices anymore and all functions from reading daily news to online shopping can be easily done using it. Most importantly, one can avoid carrying cameras for capturing random candid moments because even this is done by it with high image quality. Thus, I recommend the use of cellphones because of its versatility, inspite of being a pocket-sized device.
OP jk98 1 / 2  
Nov 8, 2014   #5
thanks:) and you have a very good structure in your essay
Tiny Tiger - / 3 2  
Nov 9, 2014   #6
You are welcome. I am a heavy cellphones user.
STEMkid 2 / 2  
Nov 9, 2014   #7
This essay reminds me of a picture that you could reference if you please, it's a picture of everything that cellphones now have about 10 years ago and it is compared with an iPhone 4 of today.


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