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Name: Claudia Preusser
Joined: Nov 30, 2014
Last Post: Dec 4, 2014
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From: Netherlands
School: Fashion Institute of Technology

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CPNL   
Dec 3, 2014
Undergraduate / My working experience in New York - FIT Fashion Merchandising, from The Netherlands. [11]

I asked my old boss at the christy rilling studio to help me also write my essay and I made up this new essay, I hope this improved!

I could see the disappointment in their eyes.

I told my parents I wanted to quit high school and attend the fashion design school in a city an hour away. They instantly said, "No", as I was only two years away from graduating. In my heart, I felt that this was the best decision for me.

I enrolled in a four-year program with a new internship opportunity every year, learning a great deal about the garment industry. At Marcha Hüskes, I had the opportunity to go to Paris Fashion Week where I received a first-hand experience on the international merchandising industry as we were in Paris to sell the collection at a trade show. I was also fortunate enough to participate in a national fashion design competition, MAFB, showing two collections (eight looks each) and was thrilled to learn I won the second prize. The same year I was named "Pearl of the school" at my school -a yearly reward to the most outstanding student. Each year I find myself pushing myself harder-to be better. For this reason I wanted to get out of my comfort zone and move to New York City.

18 March 2013, I hugged my family goodbye and said hello to my New York City adventure. After exploring the city and getting adjusted, I was ready to start my internship at Rebecca Minkoff. In the three months there, I observed what it takes to be a fashion designer at a large company and after a few experiences in the office, I realised this environment was not where I wanted to be.

During the 2013 Met Gala, I worked with a friend assisting Christy Rilling. I expressed my feelings about my internship at Rebecca Minkoff and Christy immediately opened her studio doors inviting me to finish my internship at her company. Working with Christy Rilling Studio was a dream experience. I assisted tailors on photo shoots (Elle, Lane Bryant, Condé Nast, and more) and learned about the ins and outs of the fashion industry on a very hands-on level. Sourcing fabrics for clients, pattern making, draping and organising invoicing receipts. The most rewarding experience was working alongside Christy on Lena Dunham's first Vogue cover, shot by Annie Leibovitz.

Working for a few different design companies made me realize that fashion, at its core, a business. I am confident in my fashion design background but know that the business aspect of this industry is where I need to focus and were my interest lies. I would love to be part of the Merchandising Management program at FIT as the website describes it as "a challenging and rewarding career that combines creative skills and analytical thinking." I would love to flex my analytical muscles and discover all aspects of this side of the fashion industry. I believe my strong leadership and communication skills will be a positive addition to FIT's program.

..Five years later, with their initial reluctant support, transitioning into fashion is the best decision my family and I have made.
CPNL   
Dec 2, 2014
Undergraduate / My working experience in New York - FIT Fashion Merchandising, from The Netherlands. [11]

Ok, I'm going to try and set up a new essay again, the word limit is 750 and the last essay is 535 words so I felt I should make to more of a story kind of essay and also some of the requirements are: 'This is your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities and accomplishments.' so I feel namedropping the magazines Ive worked with would work in a benefit for me, right?
CPNL   
Dec 1, 2014
Undergraduate / My working experience in New York - FIT Fashion Merchandising, from The Netherlands. [11]

I edited my essay, hope this will be better!

My parents and I just finished talking, they looked extremely sad and dissapointed.. I remember those faces extremely well, it's my motivation in times I feel like I want to give up.

That day I told them I want to quit high school and attend the fashion design school in a city an hour away. Of course they didn't agree with that because it was my second last year before graduating. I knew that this was the best decision, and 5 years later it definitely was the best decision that I've made.

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CPNL   
Nov 30, 2014
Undergraduate / My working experience in New York - FIT Fashion Merchandising, from The Netherlands. [11]

with a complete and accurate review of your essay. As of now, I can tell that you have written a general personal statement that talks about where you come f

Thank you for your great positive attitude to help me!!
Ofcourse, Im sorry!

So the requirements of the essay are this (copy/paste): What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT? Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? We'd like you to tell us in an essay. This is your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities and accomplishments. (No more than 750 words, please.)

Since a lot of applicants use the 'when I was a young girl I already loved fashion story' I wanted to highlight my connection in fashion in a different way.

I also wanted to know if my sentence build is correct since I am foreign.. Is this essay showing that I really want to get accepted to FIT? Do you think they will view it positively or is the essay too cocky?

Once again thank you a lot for your positive attitude!!!
CPNL   
Nov 30, 2014
Undergraduate / My working experience in New York - FIT Fashion Merchandising, from The Netherlands. [11]

I have a month left to submit and I want it to be perfect!! I really want to get into FIT, help me out? What could be better??

On the 18th of March 2013, I hugged my family and friends goodbye. I remember the tears in my mothers eyes very well. My flight to New York left at 5.50pm and the moment I stepped across the customs my whole body and mind knew I was doing the right thing.

I was 19 years old at the time I moved to New York for eight months. This would be the first time living outside of the Netherlands for a longer period of time. I didn't feel scared or nervous at all, I've always been adventurous and a risk taker. When I was 16 years old I felt that high school was not the right decision for me so I stopped in my fourth year and started a post secondary study at a fashion tailoring academic, that's when I knew this is the field where I am gonna be in, it was the best decision I've ever made.

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