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Slave Narratives; necessary work for the destruction of a corrupt and foul system [2]
I like it, but there's a couple things I would change.
"Many slave owners though it is fair" I would change to "many slave owners though
t it
was fair
"However, a lot of slaves who lived most of their life in this cruel and inhumane condition, showed it in their narratives." showed what in their narratives? Also, I would change the first half of that sentence to "However a lot of slaves who lived most of their live
s in
these cruel and inhumane condition
s"
"Slave narratives are valuable sources about life of fugitive or former slaves that help us understand their life experiences." If you are talking about multiple slaves, say
the lives not
life. Also, don't talk about their lives twice in one sentence.
"Most of them were written to present the reality of slavery." You don't really mean the reality of slavery. Everyone knew about slavery. They just needed to know about how bad slavery was.
"Some of the narratives tell us how life of African Americans who had escaped from slavery to the safe North changed. " same deal with life. If there's multiple slaves, say
lives. Also, "to the safe North" doesn't sound very good. Try something better.
"First narratives by African Americans slaves were published in eighteens century in England and in nineteen century" change it to "
The first narratives by African American slaves were published in
the eighteen
th century in England
, and in
the ninteen
th century...
"From 1760-1947, more than 200 book-length slave narratives were published in England and United states" change it to "From 1760 - 1947, more that 200 book - length slave narratives were published in England and
in the United States..."
"Since most of the slaves were illiterate, they dictated book-length accounts of their lives to them" it's not clear who they dictated their stories to.
"Although many of the African Americans did not know handwriting," I would change to "Although many of the African Americans did not know how to write" It's clearer that way.
"Although they were punished for that, many of the slaves persisted in religious practice." I would change it to " although the were punished for
it..."
"Also, since most of them were born in Africa, they usually characterized themselves as Africans and not slaves." That sentence has nothing to do with the rest of the paragraph.
"The tales written to inspire the abolitionist struggle are the most famous and arouse in the mid-1820s and ended with the Civil war." Too many "and"s. Also, "The tales written to inspire the abolitionist struggle are the most famous and
arouse"? Is arouse a word? And you should probably change "and ended" to "and
end".
"Most of them were intended to serve a propagandistic purpose and tend to focus on slavery as an institution rather than on individual consciousness" Love that sentence!
"The plot
of the most
of pre-Civil war slave narratives" don't put two "of"s right beside each other.
"Although it changed image of life in slavery of some people, majority still saw it as an issue, and the Civil war began." Bad sentence. Älthough it changed image of life" - that makes no sense.
"End to the Civil war and defeat of the slave states" don't say end
to the civil war. It doesn't fit. Try something like "With the end of the civil war and..."
"I think it is important to keep a record of our history no matter how horrible things are" since history is in the past, put "are"in the past-tense.
"By having narratives from former slaves humanity we're able to better understand why the system was considered to be cruel and inhumane and to learn from the errors made in the past that would allow one human to treat another human in such as despicable manner. " Too long. Try splitting it up into two sentences, or simplifying it.
"The wise person will learn from the past. It is important to understand what slavery was like. Without first person accounts, there would be a big gap in our understanding of slavery. Slave narratives allow them to have a voice of their own. These were people who had been kept as powerless as possible. It is very important for them to have a voice and to be heard and acknowledged as people." To choppy. Try to blend the sentences together.
"and the end of slavery also marked the end of slave narratives." It isn't a very good concluding sentence. It doesn't sum up anything, and just says something new. Actually, it contradicts what you said earlier about the tales of progress. Try to think of something better, if possible.
Good luck!
Could you help me with mine?
