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Name: Uladzislau Sobal
Joined: Dec 21, 2014
Last Post: Dec 23, 2014
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vlad7777   
Dec 23, 2014
Undergraduate / Common App - 'three problems solved, one remaining...' - challenged a belief or idea essay [3]

Hey!

Please, tell me what you think about this common app essay. I would be glad if you could point out mistakes.

Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again?

Three problems solved, one remaining, the hardest of all. Two hours I spend trying different ideas, but nothing fits. Then, click, and idea comes up "I should divide the whole area into small rectangles!" Meticulous checking follows: algorithms complexity - fits into the time limit, worst case scenario - works, extreme tests - no error, memory consumption - almost reaches the limit, but still works. I realize that here it is, the correct solution! My fingers start flying over the keyboard typing in hundreds of symbols that after several minutes unite into one running program. The next hour I spend restlessly eliminating numerous errors in the three hundred lines of code. Finally, it is done, five hours of brainstorming in front of a screen come to an end, I come out of the computer laboratory, with sweat rolling down my forehead. "I did it, solved that abominable task", I thought. It is the regional Olympiad in Informatics. 70 students from different cities of Brest region came to take part in this contest. I participate in this contest for the fourth time, everyone knows me here, even the committee members shake hands with me, yet I am nervous. Another couple of hours of impatient waiting and finally committee shows us the preliminary results.

I can't believe my eyes at first - the problem I have been working on for four out of five hours earned me 0 points. I am on the second place, it is quite good, but I am not pleased with the fact that I wasted so much effort for nothing. We begin self-evaluation - the process when participants run their own solutions on different tests to see if the committee's results are correct. Everything seems right, I run the checker provided by the committee from Minsk, and it shows the notorious "0 points" for my state of art solution. Seeing my desperation, a member of the committee comes up to me, lays his hand on my shoulder and says "You are quite good even without it, don't be upset, you still qualify for the National Olympiad." No, I won't give up that easily, I need to know what is wrong. I open the source code, compile, run. The first test is solved correctly! I must have at least 5 points out of 100. I quickly code my own simple checker - surprise, I have 18 out of 20 tests correct, it amounts to 90 points. That is interesting; I immediately start filling the appeal for reevaluation. Members of the committee gather around my table, they are making sure that the checker is incorrect. After they checked everything themselves, they started calling the committees of other five regions. As it turns out, others have bad checkers too. An hour more of waiting, and here I see my appeal - "satisfied" is signed by the committee. Ninety more points were enough to get me to the first place. Apart from that, it probably helped some other students from other regions to get fair results.

This occasion taught me not to give up in search for truth and to always be courageous enough to doubt opinions or facts that are often deemed unquestionable. My little investigation was duly rewarded, but what would have happened if I hadn't decided to check the solution on my own? I could have simply accepted the fact that I have zero points. Well, for me nothing would have changed actually, but I would have thought I had made a stupid mistake (which I did anyway, it is 90 out 100, 2 tests are wrong). However, some other kid in another region may have been unfairly judged and, as a result, not allowed to participate in the National Olympiad in Informatics.

The kind of curiosity that incited me to act on this contest helps me a lot in learning computer science - I always go on until I find the error in my algorithms. In my search I often find out some tricky features of algorithms. Also, it is a great way to learn a new algorithm - implementing it and trying to find mistakes. This way I quickly learn the details of an algorithms, I start to understand its mechanics.
vlad7777   
Dec 22, 2014
Undergraduate / Fitzgerald was my travel buddy - NYU supplemental essay prompt [8]

The essay is about the university, not about the city. The description in the first half seems some kind of irrelevant. You should mention specific details about what you are going to do there, tell them why you need the university, tell them why they need you. The fact that you are yet another ingredient in the mix is not enough, in my opinion.
vlad7777   
Dec 22, 2014
Undergraduate / Following the same approach and expecting different results is rightly called insanity - Common App [5]

I like your essay, although I think there is too much description of the situation. You should write more about what you learned from the experience. The essay is to learn your personal qualities, not about the way to run a club. Maybe you should add that you learned some other important things like "never give up", "nothing can be done decently alone".

To shorten it you can omit some details, like this:

I began to see low attendance as a sign of my incompetence and this affected my confidence. The initial enthusiasm I had for debate club, became dread. Insidiously, I began to accept the situation as one that could not be changed. Students were simply not interested in debate; they were all materialistic and superficial, I thought.

I think this part can be deleted entirely.
vlad7777   
Dec 22, 2014
Undergraduate / The failure that I want to relate is connected to the National Olympiad in Mathematics. [3]

I am going to apply to the University of Pennsylvania, but I am not sure about my essays

Common App essay:
Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what lessons did you learn?

The failure that I want to relate is connected to the National Olympiad in Mathematics. Ever after I transferred to Gymnasium #1, I had been actively participating in different school contests. My favorite, and consequently, the most abundant in prizes for me were Mathematics contests. I loved everything about all these numbers, logic and reasoning; although now I cannot deny that I didn't work hard enough. My peers spent gruelling hours of cogitating on different problems while I was just enjoying the benefits of my ability to solve these problems without much effort. To be completely honest, I hardly ever, if at all, did the homework my teacher assigned. As a result, I had a firm belief that I was smarter than anyone else, that I was aloof from all these homeworks and problems. I was completely certain I could win any prize without any preparation. Well, now I know how deeply mistaken I was. The time when the wrongfulness of my unduly high opinion of my abilities was to be revealed to me came when I was in the 7th grade. This is the first grade when students are first allowed to participate in National Contests. My teacher tried her best to get me prepared, although I persistently resisted all her attempts. Anyway, my skills were good enough to get me through school and regional stages. The first doubts visited my mind when I was at the district stage. There was this short squeaky garrulous boy who was better than I. I was unwilling to admit it, but the results were not to be argued with. I was the second. I did qualify for the final stage - the National Olympiad in Mathematics. It didn't matter for me, I was devastated because I was not the best. Well, this stage of the contest had an even better surprise for me. By that moment I already didn't have that high opinion of myself, but there was another hit coming. Guess what place I took? It was the last one! To say the least, it was humiliating. But also very salutary. I finally admitted that I am not the best in this world. Besides that, I learned more. First, I realized that nothing can be attained without arduous work. Had I studied harder (or even studied at all), I would have had a better result. Second, I learned that the higher you get, the smarter men you get to know. So no matter how hard you work, there will always be someone who is better, who has something to teach you. And the final and I believe the most important thing: one can't achieve anything without having a definite goal. I was simply participating because my teacher told me.

I think I owe all my further successes to this failure. After this misfortunate year, I shifted to informatics. I liked this subject more, and I was ready to trudge through indefinite topics and problems because it gave me pleasure. In this subject I found mathematics I liked and lots of logic that I adore most of all. I enthusiastically approached every problem, worked on every my mistake. With avidity I devoured books on programming languages and algorithms. I have set a goal to take part in the International Olympiad in Informatics (IOI). Now, after years of work, although I didn't succeed, I still have prizes of different contests and science fairs, some of them international, but I don't even dare to think that I am in any way smarter than others because I know that this is the biggest mistake I ever made and I am not going to make it again. I have lots to learn, but I have one of the best things - I have passion for the subject of my work, I have a fervent desire to learn as much as possible.

And the penns essay:
Mod comment:One essay at one time please

Could you please help me and point out my mistakes? The common app essays seems too trite to me. Tell me if it is so, maybe I will change the topic.
vlad7777   
Dec 21, 2014
Undergraduate / "Hey, grandma, I've got something to tell you. I'm going to apply to US universities." Common App. [3]

Hey!

I would be very grateful if you could read my Common Application essay.
I am from Belarus and English is not my first language, so please point out all grammatical errors you see.

The prompt:

Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again?

My grandmother is extremely afraid of change, of anything that is not normal. For her, the perfect world is the world of clemency and serenity. I love her for that, I love her for her ability to enjoy everything that is ordinary. But I am different, I always strive for something. I remember the first time I greatly surprised her. It was when I decided to apply to Gymnasium #1, the best school in my city. She was worried, she did not understand why we would want to change anything. She claimed that it would ruin me. It did not. Then there was a moment when I had to tell her that I am going to Moscow to take part in a programming contest. This time she claimed that this country is insane, that it is filled with rude drunkards and with immigrants from Kazakhstan. Well, I had no problems there. Again, she was worried when I told her I was going to Poland, and when she learned that I box. I love my grandma, and always I try my best to calm her down. Until now, I was successful. Now she is worried about me, no matter how hard I try to persuade her that I am going to be fine.

Someday this summer, my parents and I came over to my grandmother to see how she is doing. Our happy family were contentedly devouring pancakes, when I remembered I had something important to say. I guess it was like a thunder out of a clear sky for my grandmother.

"Hey, grandma, I've got something to tell you."
"Oh God, what is it again?"
"To make a long story short, I'm going to apply to US universities."

She stopped dead. She was intently staring at me, probably expecting that I would say it was a joke. When she finally realized I was serious, she barely could say anything. She said I was insane. As explained her the details, her disapproval of the idea only grew more determined. "It's a huge waste of money!", "What do you know of this civilization over the ocean? Nothing!", "We need you here, we will miss you terribly, if you happen to get accepted." Not only is my grandma sceptical about this idea, but also my peers. For them, only rich kids can study in the US or in the UK. For them, the idea of spending amount of money that parents earn in a month on taking tests and sending applications is ridiculous. Only my parents and a few of my best friends support me. I am openly challenging the common belief that no ordinary mortal from Belarus can study in the US.

However, some part of me is still clamoring the same arguments that my grandmother used as I am typing this sentence. Of course, there is also another part, the part that believes that I can do it, that I must take the opportunity, that it is worth it, no matter how insane it sounds. Fortunately for me, the believer part is stronger. This part enables me to stand against all doubts and take the chance. I believe in future, and I am certain that even if I fail, I will not regret spending so much money to apply and if given an opportunity to choose again, I will do the same thing again.

Even if I fail, I have already acquired a lot in the process. I got to know some great people when I was taking the SAT tests in Warsaw. Some of them are truly brilliant and ambitious minds who already working at research projects at universities. Apart from finding new friends, I also greatly improved my English skills. Preparing an application is certainly a valuable experience, and my TOEFL results can be used in myriads of ways.
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