marissa
Feb 3, 2015
Undergraduate / Gymnastics and I - 'Lunch never failed to make my stomach ache with butterflies' [3]
I think the essay is really well written. The only corrections I have are:
"my peer's ruthlessness" should be corrected to "my peers' ruthlessness"
"statute of limitations:" I think you meant, "statue of limitations"
"My coaches never stood allowed for such nonsense." I think it would be better worded as, "My coaches never allowed such nonsense."
Overall, I really like your writing style and I think this essay is unique and captivating.
I think the essay is really well written. The only corrections I have are:
"my peer's ruthlessness" should be corrected to "my peers' ruthlessness"
"statute of limitations:" I think you meant, "statue of limitations"
"My coaches never stood allowed for such nonsense." I think it would be better worded as, "My coaches never allowed such nonsense."
Overall, I really like your writing style and I think this essay is unique and captivating.