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Posts by marissa
Name: Marissa Hum
Joined: Jan 12, 2015
Last Post: Feb 3, 2015
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From: Canada
School: Thornlea Secondary School

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marissa   
Feb 3, 2015
Undergraduate / Gymnastics and I - 'Lunch never failed to make my stomach ache with butterflies' [3]

I think the essay is really well written. The only corrections I have are:
"my peer's ruthlessness" should be corrected to "my peers' ruthlessness"
"statute of limitations:" I think you meant, "statue of limitations"
"My coaches never stood allowed for such nonsense." I think it would be better worded as, "My coaches never allowed such nonsense."

Overall, I really like your writing style and I think this essay is unique and captivating.
marissa   
Jan 23, 2015
Undergraduate / Everyone has a strength and a weakness - a superpower (mine is perseverance) and a kryptonite [3]

Describe one of your greatest strengths. Given the knowledge you have gained about the Queen's Commerce Program, describe how this strength will help you to succeed in the program. (Please limit your answer to 300 words or fewer, approximately 1950 characters with spaces)

Everyone has a strength and a weakness - a superpower and a kryptonite. My greatest strength is my perseverance, especially, in spite of adversity. There have been times where I have felt failure but, these situations have become successes due to my resilience and my refusal to give up.

From my knowledge of the Queen's Commerce Program, I know that it is mentally grueling but achievable. I am certain that with my perseverance, I will successfully complete the program with flying colours. One of the many reasons I appreciate the commerce program is because it is very structured, detailed and diverse. The program would allow me to try different categories within the business field so that I can learn a little bit about everything. I know that I will not be familiar with every subject covered in the curriculum but, with perseverance, I will continue to study and work despite my uncertainty.

I learned a long time ago to never give up or quit. Without perseverance the goals I have set for my experiences at Queen's would not be accomplished. I have worked hard throughout my high school career to excel in my classes and extra-curricular activities. I will adapt to my environment so that I can easily navigate through my learning. I plan to continue this habit at Queen's and to persevere throughout my studies and future endeavours.

One of the most important lessons I have learned is that you cannot have great success without experiencing great failure. When a situation resulting in failure arises, it is important to persevere despite adversity and to continue to work towards goals. If I gave up every time I felt discouraged or did not believe I could succeed, I would never have been brave enough to apply to the Queen's Commerce Program.

Choose one extracurricular activity...
MOD comment:One prompt at one time please
marissa   
Jan 13, 2015
Undergraduate / A 500-word biography that outlines your educational and extracurricular interests. [2]

Ever since I can connect with reality, my fascination for the Arts was unlimited.

If you are referring to a specific time, keep "Ever since" but, if you are trying to provide a reason for your fascination, it would be better to say "Due to the fact that,". Instead of saying "was unlimited," say "has become limitless" or something similar.

Also, instead of saying "Throughout the years of Kindergarten", make it more personal by saying, "Throughout my years in kindergarten,"
marissa   
Jan 12, 2015
Undergraduate / While studying at Queen's University, I hope to learn, live, and grow as a student. [2]

In an essay of 300 words, or fewer (approximately 1950 characters with spaces), write about your goals for your time at Queen's University and beyond.

Throughout my life I have had a general idea of what I hope to achieve in university. While studying at Queen's University, I hope to learn, live, and grow as a student. I know that with an education from Queen's, I will be able to pursue my future ambitions with strength, creativity and efficiency. Success can be found in many forms - money, happiness, health, etc. - and I am certain Queen's can help me reach all levels of success.

Queen's University is well-known for their outstanding education and I hope to learn as much as possible. As I begin my future, I will start a more independent lifestyle; the newly-found freedom to live on my own. With the combination of a superior learning experience and living in residence, I am certain that I will mature intellectually and mentally. This will push my boundaries and take me out of my comfort zone so that I will be able to try new things and experience a one-of-a-kind opportunity at Queen's.

After completing my undergraduate and graduate degrees at Queen's University, I plan to pursue a career in law because human rights and corporate law interest me. I have always been inspired by those who selflessly help others in the global community. On the other hand, business has also interested me as well due to the variety of categories in this career path - from creative marketing to statistical analysis, the possibilities are endless. An education at Queen's would allow me to explore my diverse interests and solidify a career path for myself.

I have many aspirations and goals to achieve in the future. I believe Queen's will be able to prepare me for my future. Moreover, I believe that Queen's University will help me find the right career path for myself.
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