Taliahmariee1
Jan 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / In my view staying with the family for a longer time is better. [6]
I completely agree with the stance your taking. Staying with family for a longer period of time is helpful, but only in certain situations. For example, if you feel the need you have to help care for people in your family, it can teach you responsibility. At the same time I feel like leaving/ being independent is helpful because you can learn a little bit more responsibility and how to be more independent. If you stay with family longer they my try to baby you and help you more than you need. Anyway i do agree with your approach to this essay, I do believe that you should elaborate a little more on your second reasoning.
I completely agree with the stance your taking. Staying with family for a longer period of time is helpful, but only in certain situations. For example, if you feel the need you have to help care for people in your family, it can teach you responsibility. At the same time I feel like leaving/ being independent is helpful because you can learn a little bit more responsibility and how to be more independent. If you stay with family longer they my try to baby you and help you more than you need. Anyway i do agree with your approach to this essay, I do believe that you should elaborate a little more on your second reasoning.
