Writing Feedback / "Engineering is an application of science to the purpose of life" said by Count Rumford [3]

I'm glad to hear that, thank you for correcting my essay and i'll rewrite it with your suggestions.

Writing Feedback / It is often alleged that many teenagers want to reach their higher education after finishing school. [4]

yes I know but I referred to the sentence preceded. >>There has been increasing interest in teenagers should spend their spare times << this guy

Undergraduate / Career and life goals - architect's dream [2]

Since I was a kid, I dreamed of being an architect because buildings, highways always caught my attention. As I passed them by, I was amazed by their structures and shapes which represented the level of civilization of my country , our power to create better stuff every time.(it is an excess, you don't need it) I wanted to be part of this field,

Writing Feedback / It is often alleged that many teenagers want to reach their higher education after finishing school. [4]

There has been increasing interest in teenagers should spend their spare times(this is grammatically incorrect and hence it cant be understandable) working on a volunteer basis in the local community. Many people believe(people use this to begin their introduction or to repeat the task in the conclusion, I suggest you should bring this to your beginning) that this approach brings an excess (can you try to use another words? because its meaning is not appropriate) of benefits for both individual and society. Personally, I entirely agree with this statement.

I will suggest mine:" it is argued that young people should spend their spare times working on a voluntary basis because it can be beneficial for the individual and society as a whole. personally, I strongly disagree that we should force all teenagers to work without payment."

Writing Feedback / Video surveillance has become common place in many countries to reduce crime [5]

the phrase " at the mean time" - I think it is the right time when the crime happens.

Writing Feedback / The swift expansion, emergence of industries and businesses, made urban areas become more cramped [4]

thanks a lot, can you give me some advices about the ideas of my main paragraphs and conclusion paragraph?

Graduate / I'm a biotechnology engineer, who has big ambition and many motives to prove himself - Motiv. letter [2]

who has big ambitions and many motives to prove himself...

Also, I work in the weight section ...

in addition, I make software/fixing devices and internet networks for the company...

have good ability to guide/lead groups

share new sciences , ideas and information with them

I interest in computer and I have many skills in ICDL, C++,and others

and I red about it on many websites - in case if you do not want to repeat the phrase "your organization"

I'll achieve a big chance If I can work with you because I'll have a chance to offer some aid to people who in need and I'll be more relax because charitable work and assistance makes you feel comfortable and gives you a psychological more activity and motivation to provide more. - you should try to break this sentence into shorter sentences, it may help the reader easier to understand. also, try to write it in a more simple way because I can hardly get your ideas.

I think I'll be your success and a beneficial one ... because of my experience in communicating with others and the ability in solving problems, persuading those around me and always develop myself.

I have big ambitions and dreams for the future and I'll achieve all of it when the war end