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"Engineering is an application of science to the purpose of life" said by Count Rumford


anhminh3105 3 / 7 1  
Mar 5, 2015   #1
"Engineering is an application of science to the purpose of life" said by Count Rumford. In fact, it has a significant impact on the development of our modern society in the recent decades.

As far as I concern, engineers integrate their knowledge of physical sciences with more abstract realms beyond the boundaries of current technology in all areas of life. In other words, engineers are problems solver who seek for quicker, better and less expensive ways to meet tough challenges.

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EF_Jasmine - / 68 39  
Mar 5, 2015   #2
Hello, my edits and suggestions are below:

"Engineering is an application of science to the purpose of life" said by Count Rumford. In fact, it has a significant impact on the development of our modern society in the recent decades. ( I would love to have you elaborate on your quote and how it ties to engineering.)

As far as I (am) concern(ed), engineers integrate their knowledge of physical sciences with more abstract realms beyond the boundaries of current technology in all areas of life. In other words, engineers are problem solver(s) who seek for quicker, better advanced, and less expensive ways to meet tough challenges. For example, Software engineers (,for example,) are working with source codes in terms of creating applications and software to help people with their works and communication. Civil engineers construct skyscrapers, buildings and accommodations with unique architectures. ( Another sentence about "types" of engineers would be a great fit here as another sentence.)

There are several attributes (that) accompany with an engineer's profession. that Anyone (that) decides to chase this profession should be aware of these ( Very confusing sentence, I placed in my suggestion by re-wording it) . The very first requirement is a broad knowledge in variety of fields. A civil engineer have has to understand about the environment so that he (or she) could can construct strong skyscrapers with solid foundations. which are able to endure severe weather conditions <( consider making this into a new full sentence). The next one requirement is the ability of deductive reasoning, it is useful for dealing with tough problems. A software engineer usually( has to) apply the process of deductions in order to come up with algorithms for his(or her) source codes. Last but not least(it) is the ability of working in (a)group, the team which works as a single unite will produce the optimal efficiency in what it is doing.

Engineering is a job that brings imaginations to real life and hence engineers must face with many challenges during their works. ( Give concrete examples about the challenges and imagination to real life:))

Environmental engineers seek for solutions to help reduce the level of air pollution released from many industries, find the ways to bring clean water to poor people and prolong the period of erosion. Software engineers are trying to upgrade their software with new features in order to compete with others. Medical engineers are studying in terms of making new vaccines with lower price.( Move this red section to your second paragraph)

Although this profession is difficult and challenging, I have still made my mind to chase this career. The first reason is that the difficulties themselves of this job is very interesting and I understand my works will contribute to the development of the mankind. I am able to master the technology and use them to create tools and devices to help people in living and working. ( Move these three sentences to your paragraph about challenges)

In conclusion, I believe that engineering is the occupation of the future and engineers will make over the innovation of techno?

Hello! First off I want to say you have some great ideas about engineering, and you are very knowledgeable. I enjoyed reading your ideas. I would highly suggest you outline your essays before writing, though you have many good ideas, they are scattered. I also suggest you read your essay aloud:) you are missing some words between your sentences. Look at the prompt above, you can even follow the same question form they are asking, making each asked question a paragraph in itself. Great start!
OP anhminh3105 3 / 7 1  
Mar 5, 2015   #3
I'm glad to hear that, thank you for correcting my essay and i'll rewrite it with your suggestions.


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