linglinzhang
Feb 26, 2015
Writing Feedback / We shouldn't ignore the underlying danger of spending great amount of time practicing sport; TOEFL [3]
Dear Alleb,
Thank you soooo much for such patient and careful review for my poor essay! Your suggestions are quite enlightening and useful for me.
Sometimes I just don't know how to add the relevant examples,I am worry about that add an example deliberately will make the reader feel bad for me.In fact,in 30 minutes I usually can't considerate too much,so I am easy to ignore adding more synonyms and giving examples.I have a lot to improve and just as you said,practice,practice and practice.
Still,there is one thing I want to consult you more.As you said that proper spacing of each words and sentences should be paid attention to,so how can I approach this?By using more subordinate clauses or combining short sentences with long sentences?
Thank you sincerely ^ ^
Dear Alleb,
Thank you soooo much for such patient and careful review for my poor essay! Your suggestions are quite enlightening and useful for me.
Sometimes I just don't know how to add the relevant examples,I am worry about that add an example deliberately will make the reader feel bad for me.In fact,in 30 minutes I usually can't considerate too much,so I am easy to ignore adding more synonyms and giving examples.I have a lot to improve and just as you said,practice,practice and practice.
Still,there is one thing I want to consult you more.As you said that proper spacing of each words and sentences should be paid attention to,so how can I approach this?By using more subordinate clauses or combining short sentences with long sentences?
Thank you sincerely ^ ^
