Undergraduate / "Arguments of Affection"; dinner with my family. UC Prompt #1 [3]

I think your essay is wonderful. It grabbed my attention and I wanted to read more. You were very creative and you realized that family is the most important thing.

Graduate / Describe a leadership experience and its outcome. [2]

dis_is_me31,

In the first paragraph you begin a brief statement on the importance of leadership and how it shaped you. The next paragraph should discuss the leadership event. When describing details make sure you don't use run on sentences. For example in the first paragraph you do not need to mention the number of students that were chosen and how much time you needed to practice. Talk about your leadership role. Were their any challenges? What were the parts you enjoyed? Talk about the overall learning experience and how you have grown from it. When you write a statement, the next sentence you be an explanation. Make sure that your spelling is correct.