vinhson87
May 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Solving Sustainable Electricity in California [3]
Here is the version 2 of my essay. Can you guys help me fix it .
Across the word today, global warming, pollution and lack of fresh water issues have been threatened on the existence and development of human civilization. Inevitably, we have to face with the issues if we want to keep our civilization existence and advance. I would like to bring your attention by three reasons why we have to produce enough sustainable electricity for usage is the most important thing in the word today.
The first reason is the electricity can be used to fin salt water to fresh water without worrying that we produce waste to environment. In fact, living in California where we know how important of fresh water is to sustain our agriculture, economic, industry, entertainment etc. But what if California has been continuing drought for next few years then we would be in big troubles. According to, Mr. Vuon Xuan Dien who has worked at Long Beach Department , and discovered the method uses less electricity and more effectively than the others to fin salt water to potable water. And he said if fresh water in California becomes more and more scarce then Federal government would use this method to supply enough water for us. So, we can use electricity to fin the water without the worrying if we can produce enough the electricity that can bear our needs.
The second reason is the electricity can be used to cease global warming. According to EPA, Carbon dioxide (CO2) is the main cause which makes the warming of our planet.CO2, which damages our ozone layer, comes from several source but the most CO2 in our planet today comes from burning fossil fuels and gasoline. Nevertheless, we can solve the problem or at least reduce the effect if we can produce enough sustainable electricity to replay burning fossil gasoline and gasoline. For example, we can use the electricity in industries instead burning coal or oil which produces too much CO2. Also, we would use all electricity cars or metro for our transport, and cover our country by the dense network of free charging stations to recharge our cars instead use gasoline to keep our cars on the roads.
The third reason is the electricity can be used to supply for our needs instead of burning fossil fuels and using nuclear power which are very dangerous and pollutant. According to EIA, to producing electricity, we pollute our environment by burning fossil fuels which is release approximately three billion pounds of CO2 in 2008. Threateningly, nuclear power is very dangerous and creates radioactive waste which is very dangerous and need hundred thousand years to decay. Nevertheless, the electricity would replace the process which we use fossil fuels and nuclear power to produce electricity.
In conclusion, I believe that many our problems would be solved easily if we can find or produce enough sustainable energy for usage. We have been working on many projects in order to achieve our hope. For example, we build and use solar energy to produce electricity. In addition, we have worked on a giant project call the International Thermonuclear Reactor which can use fusion reaction which is completely safe and clean to production electricity for the whole word. In summary, we are hard working on a wide variety of projects and I hope in the near future we would make our dream becoming true.
Here is the version 2 of my essay. Can you guys help me fix it .
Across the word today, global warming, pollution and lack of fresh water issues have been threatened on the existence and development of human civilization. Inevitably, we have to face with the issues if we want to keep our civilization existence and advance. I would like to bring your attention by three reasons why we have to produce enough sustainable electricity for usage is the most important thing in the word today.
The first reason is the electricity can be used to fin salt water to fresh water without worrying that we produce waste to environment. In fact, living in California where we know how important of fresh water is to sustain our agriculture, economic, industry, entertainment etc. But what if California has been continuing drought for next few years then we would be in big troubles. According to, Mr. Vuon Xuan Dien who has worked at Long Beach Department , and discovered the method uses less electricity and more effectively than the others to fin salt water to potable water. And he said if fresh water in California becomes more and more scarce then Federal government would use this method to supply enough water for us. So, we can use electricity to fin the water without the worrying if we can produce enough the electricity that can bear our needs.
The second reason is the electricity can be used to cease global warming. According to EPA, Carbon dioxide (CO2) is the main cause which makes the warming of our planet.CO2, which damages our ozone layer, comes from several source but the most CO2 in our planet today comes from burning fossil fuels and gasoline. Nevertheless, we can solve the problem or at least reduce the effect if we can produce enough sustainable electricity to replay burning fossil gasoline and gasoline. For example, we can use the electricity in industries instead burning coal or oil which produces too much CO2. Also, we would use all electricity cars or metro for our transport, and cover our country by the dense network of free charging stations to recharge our cars instead use gasoline to keep our cars on the roads.
The third reason is the electricity can be used to supply for our needs instead of burning fossil fuels and using nuclear power which are very dangerous and pollutant. According to EIA, to producing electricity, we pollute our environment by burning fossil fuels which is release approximately three billion pounds of CO2 in 2008. Threateningly, nuclear power is very dangerous and creates radioactive waste which is very dangerous and need hundred thousand years to decay. Nevertheless, the electricity would replace the process which we use fossil fuels and nuclear power to produce electricity.
In conclusion, I believe that many our problems would be solved easily if we can find or produce enough sustainable energy for usage. We have been working on many projects in order to achieve our hope. For example, we build and use solar energy to produce electricity. In addition, we have worked on a giant project call the International Thermonuclear Reactor which can use fusion reaction which is completely safe and clean to production electricity for the whole word. In summary, we are hard working on a wide variety of projects and I hope in the near future we would make our dream becoming true.