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Name: Ngo Thi My Linh
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Jun 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / Pretty, attractive girl with great voice - we spend a lot of time together. Best friend paragraph. [6]

Plsss... help me to correct this paragraph

During 12 years at school, I have had many friends. However, of all, Ryan is my best friend. We acquainted with each other when we began studying at primary school. She is a pretty girl, that attracted me in the first see. She is a person who always go to school with me day by day, go shopping in free time, watch ghost film at night,ect. Those is my happy time in my life. Moreover, she has especialy a good voice so that whenever I'm in a bad mood she'll sing songs I love to appease me. Besides, she also gives me many advices when i'm in trouble, stand by me when I have difficultys. She says me what is right, what is wrong, what should I do and I dont, ect. Little by little, I realize that She is a important person in my life. I just says to her that: Ryan, you're the greatest friend I has in my life.
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