Heilia
Jul 1, 2015
Writing Feedback / To understand the primary characteristics of a society, it is important to learn the village areas. [3]
Hello! I have just noticed few very obvious mistakes:
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To understandthe primary characteristics of society, it is important to observe the development in the village areas.
In any country, major cities are usually more developed thanvillages because they have multiple resources to connect with other valuable means , such as I nternet, media activity, wire or wireless communication systems. Because of superior resources city people are more aware in terms of education, health and technology. Inthe cities facilities such as big malls, nightclubs, healthfacilities , administration, advance travelling facilities , major food outlets, multinational companies and infrastructures make people see how things have developed in other countries . It availsallows people to change their life style, communication, multiple resources of income.sources of incomes .
Whereas (maybe "However" would be better...) , the rural society will be completely different from cities one. Reasons are very clear that even government majorly(mostly?) focus on the development of cities rather than rural areas. For example, electricity in cities are usually provided 24/7, whereas in village it is provided just for 8-10 hours, sometimeseven merely 2-3 hours. So Therefore people would not make themselves completely aware of about their surroundings. It leads to a significant difference between the characteristics of cities and villages.
A country would be only developed when its villages are equally developed. In cities, wome n usually work with me n, but in villages wome n are still expected to be just housewives. That makes significantof difference in society characteristics. In village, there are not good facilities available in terms of roads, administration, travelling facilities . People are primarily dependent on farming to earn money. So their thoughts are also circumscribed in similar fields.
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In conclusion, important characteristics of society can only be seen by the classof living that lives in village area. As it is clear from the paragraph aboveparagraph , societies in cities are quite developed and far ahead than village ones. Therefore, only cities' characteristics would not be enough to get clear picture of overall society.
I am so sorry, it was very confusing to read. Was it supposed to be an essay? :C
Hello! I have just noticed few very obvious mistakes:
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To understand
In any country, major cities are usually more developed thanvillages because they have multiple resources to connect with other valuable means , such as I nternet, media activity, wire or wireless communication systems. Because of superior resources city people are more aware in terms of education, health and technology. In
Whereas (maybe "However" would be better...) , the rural society will be completely different from cities one. Reasons are very clear that even government majorly(mostly?) focus on the development of cities rather than rural areas. For example, electricity in cities are usually provided 24/7, whereas in village it is provided just for 8-10 hours, sometimes
A country would be only developed when its villages are equally developed. In cities, wome n usually work with me n, but in villages wome n are still expected to be just housewives. That makes significant
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In conclusion, important characteristics of society can only be seen by the class
I am so sorry, it was very confusing to read. Was it supposed to be an essay? :C
