Undergraduate / The recipe for NYU, a missing ingredient which bring back this school on track to its future success [4]

Hello! I just want to see if I'm going in the right direction with my essay and receive any input/suggestions on changing it!

Prompt:
NYU is global, urban, inspired, smart, connected, and bold. What can NYU offer you, and what can you offer NYU? (200-400 words)

A cup of diversity, two tablespoons of opportunity, five teaspoons of culture and a pinch of beauty-the recipe for NYU which has flourished for the past 184 years, but now seems to be missing an ingredient detrimental to its future success. A dash of me, an exotic and spicy addition, will bring soul and determination into the stew.

Struggling to answer the prodding question of what makes me 'happy', I've been on a constant search investigating my environment and juggling new activities. Time and time again one thing has proven to illuminate the engulfing darkness: a city. Not just the sight of skyscrapers or flashing lights, but the sounds of traffic and languages, the smell of multicultural dishes and the overall vibe. The mere existence of 'Concrete Jungle' gives me goosebumps, and for that I promise to plant my happiness in its roots. NYU is the brain of the city that never sleeps and I wish to be among its synapses.

At the age of three, I became my father's son and daughter by taking up his love of sports and as a little girl, I told myself that someday I'd be the first female General Manager for an NFL team. Tisch Institute is one of the few schools in the nation which offers me the chance to pursue a Bachelor's in sports management and New York-home to the headquarters on the NFL, NBA and MLB-provides the greatest of opportunities to achieve such. Wanting to enter such industry won't be easy, but flaunting my ability to 'hang with the boys' will be an intoxicating ride.

In a city where noise floods the streets, mine shall be heard; the melting pot known as New York-once properly prepped with me in the mix-will have never tasted so mouthwatering.