Writing Feedback / Topic: Think about the sources of nutritional information. Which sources do you trust the most? Why? [2]

Topic: Think about the sources of nutritional information. Which sources do you trust the most? Why? (5-8 sentences)

Nutritionist is the source that I trust most. Nutritionist is a person who is an expert on the relationship between food and health. Therefore, they are trained to give advice about safe diet, based on the credible evidence. In addition, they are those who provide information and knowledge about nutrition for magazines, books, newspapers,...Therefore, we should hear from them directly instead of believing in media, which can report information in an incorrect way. In conclusion, I do trust in nutritionist rather than other sources of nutritional information.

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Undergraduate / Think about the person you admire. What qualities does that person have that are admirable? [4]

Topic: Think about the person you admire. What qualities does that person have that are admirable? (5-8 sentences)

The person I admire most is my father. Diligence is the first quality of him that make me admire. My father works hard day by day without complaining about the tiredness that he has to refer in his job, he worked hard in silence. Moreover, my father is a brave man, he did not seem afraid of anything. The only thing which he afraid of is how to earn more money to support the family because his health becomes weaker and weaker. I find myself needing to study harder and harder in order not to betray his expectation for me. In a word, diligence and bravery are the qualities that I immensely admired in my father.

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