krobledo226
Aug 30, 2015
Letters / I need HUMOR; roommate letter / 'No curfew!' / CIA mission - Stanford Essay [5]
so which one would you recommend? @justivy03
so which one would you recommend? @justivy03
krobledo226
Aug 7, 2015
Letters / I need HUMOR; roommate letter / 'No curfew!' / CIA mission - Stanford Essay [5]
Thank you at @EF_Kevin, I was not to sure about suing the last one but thanks :)
Thank you at @EF_Kevin, I was not to sure about suing the last one but thanks :)
krobledo226
Aug 5, 2015
Letters / I need HUMOR; roommate letter / 'No curfew!' / CIA mission - Stanford Essay [5]
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate -- and us -- know you better. (250 word limit) PLEASE HELP I DO NOT KNOW WHICH ONE IS BETTER :(
(Option 1)
Please note the next time you will be banned for posting useless answers in other students' threads.
Dear Roommate,
Organization, respect, and honesty are three words that truly describe me. I like to maintain my space organized because it was the way I was raised and have learned the hard way that it is easier to find your stuff that way, In addition, I am respectful so you would never have to worry about me calling you something you do not like, not finding your stuff, or not asking you for permission to invite a friend over for while to study. However, the most important thing about me is my honesty, I just do not want us to be roommates but friends, knowing that you can trust me with any information or problems that you are facing; knowing that I will be there to help.
I have not had an easy life, I know how it feels when someone insults you or talks about subjects that make you want to cry so I will never do those things to you.
I know there are gonna be days where I do not sleep and it is okay because I know it is for my education. The most exciting thing about this is that college is a journey, so I sort of do not know what to expect, since no one in my family has ever been close to going to college; yet, I know this is a place where I will find out who I really am and discover things that I have not yet discovered in me.
(Option 2)
No curfew!
I know there are going to be nights where we do not sleep because we are working on projects or simply studying for three quizzes for the next day. I do not mind you sleeping in late or early just be in the dorm so I know you are there. I know college can be stressful and sleeping time will become precious! So if you oversleep I will wake you up.
With that out of the way, I guess I should tell you about myself. I am very organized I have a folder for everything and a place for everything, I can see my volleyball in the closet, my outfit for the next day on the hanger, and all my Harry Potter collection in a bookshelf.
As an individual I am a very positive person and enthusiastic which gets really contagious when I am around.
I love to speak in Spanish, English, Italian, and Sarcasm it really comes in handy, I tell you with me around you will never stop laughing.
I express myself through music so I literally have a song for every occasion.
I will be studying economics, so if you need help in how to handle your budget just come to me I will be glad to assist you. I really look forward to college, because I know here is where I will find out who I really am and things beyond my imagination.
I really look forward to our four years!
Sincerely, Kimberly Robledo
Option 3
CIA AGENT: Kimberly Robledo alias "kimbutlie"
MISSION: Get your roommate and Stanford admissions to like you without knowing you personally. Must do an inception.
IDEA: Kimberly is the nicest girl you would ever meet, she is dedicated and way to organize for her own good but even then she cannot sometimes find her stuff. Loves to share her stuff but if she cannot find her Ken Wong Foundation, she will have to find a new one (sad face). Most dedicated student ever meet has been able to overcome hatred and bullying by believing in herself. Excellent candidate for for Stanford University, has dream about applying to this school since third grade.
EXTRA INFORMATION: Expert in knowing how to study for a test; yet, has test trauma, the ability to be frighten of tests. Loves to do makeup, has done hair and makeup for many promos, weddings, and quinceaneras. Can be found in Stanford's nearest chinese food place, she loves chinese food. Occasionally can be found in McDonald's but only for the free wiffy.
ARMORY: Lead, always carries lead for pencils. Post-its to write observations and data about what she is reading. And the worst of all a BOOK, because education is the world's biggest weapon.
MISSION STATUS: Waiting for Stanford's Admission approval and re-evolutionize Stanford with her amazing business and computer skills.
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate -- and us -- know you better. (250 word limit) PLEASE HELP I DO NOT KNOW WHICH ONE IS BETTER :(
(Option 1)
Please note the next time you will be banned for posting useless answers in other students' threads.
Dear Roommate,
Organization, respect, and honesty are three words that truly describe me. I like to maintain my space organized because it was the way I was raised and have learned the hard way that it is easier to find your stuff that way, In addition, I am respectful so you would never have to worry about me calling you something you do not like, not finding your stuff, or not asking you for permission to invite a friend over for while to study. However, the most important thing about me is my honesty, I just do not want us to be roommates but friends, knowing that you can trust me with any information or problems that you are facing; knowing that I will be there to help.
I have not had an easy life, I know how it feels when someone insults you or talks about subjects that make you want to cry so I will never do those things to you.
I know there are gonna be days where I do not sleep and it is okay because I know it is for my education. The most exciting thing about this is that college is a journey, so I sort of do not know what to expect, since no one in my family has ever been close to going to college; yet, I know this is a place where I will find out who I really am and discover things that I have not yet discovered in me.
(Option 2)
No curfew!
I know there are going to be nights where we do not sleep because we are working on projects or simply studying for three quizzes for the next day. I do not mind you sleeping in late or early just be in the dorm so I know you are there. I know college can be stressful and sleeping time will become precious! So if you oversleep I will wake you up.
With that out of the way, I guess I should tell you about myself. I am very organized I have a folder for everything and a place for everything, I can see my volleyball in the closet, my outfit for the next day on the hanger, and all my Harry Potter collection in a bookshelf.
As an individual I am a very positive person and enthusiastic which gets really contagious when I am around.
I love to speak in Spanish, English, Italian, and Sarcasm it really comes in handy, I tell you with me around you will never stop laughing.
I express myself through music so I literally have a song for every occasion.
I will be studying economics, so if you need help in how to handle your budget just come to me I will be glad to assist you. I really look forward to college, because I know here is where I will find out who I really am and things beyond my imagination.
I really look forward to our four years!
Sincerely, Kimberly Robledo
Option 3
CIA AGENT: Kimberly Robledo alias "kimbutlie"
MISSION: Get your roommate and Stanford admissions to like you without knowing you personally. Must do an inception.
IDEA: Kimberly is the nicest girl you would ever meet, she is dedicated and way to organize for her own good but even then she cannot sometimes find her stuff. Loves to share her stuff but if she cannot find her Ken Wong Foundation, she will have to find a new one (sad face). Most dedicated student ever meet has been able to overcome hatred and bullying by believing in herself. Excellent candidate for for Stanford University, has dream about applying to this school since third grade.
EXTRA INFORMATION: Expert in knowing how to study for a test; yet, has test trauma, the ability to be frighten of tests. Loves to do makeup, has done hair and makeup for many promos, weddings, and quinceaneras. Can be found in Stanford's nearest chinese food place, she loves chinese food. Occasionally can be found in McDonald's but only for the free wiffy.
ARMORY: Lead, always carries lead for pencils. Post-its to write observations and data about what she is reading. And the worst of all a BOOK, because education is the world's biggest weapon.
MISSION STATUS: Waiting for Stanford's Admission approval and re-evolutionize Stanford with her amazing business and computer skills.
krobledo226
Aug 5, 2015
Undergraduate / UT Austin Transfer - Statement of Purpose (Topic A) - "For a Short While, We Were Legion" [2]
Your first sentence should be a hook like : "While everyone was walking the row to get their diploma, I was not, unfortunately I stayed home because I had failed to fulfill the minimum high school requirements" other wise the essay is good, I love the story and detailed. I loved how you added the contribution you would make and how your are different, even for me that is difficult now that I am applying to colleges.
Your first sentence should be a hook like : "While everyone was walking the row to get their diploma, I was not, unfortunately I stayed home because I had failed to fulfill the minimum high school requirements" other wise the essay is good, I love the story and detailed. I loved how you added the contribution you would make and how your are different, even for me that is difficult now that I am applying to colleges.
krobledo226
Aug 5, 2015
Undergraduate / Goal - to explore the great big world that lies around us; University of Oregon application essay [3]
Ever since I can remember I have been fascinated by the idea of exploring the greatbig world that lies around us, I can remember the feeling of excitement as I boarded the plane with my dad the summer of my freshman year whenas we headed to Europe. I was so overjoyed that I was finally escaping the boundaries of my city and heading to greater things seeking into an adventure,; after all, the world was so big and I had seen so little of ithas so much to offer .
Ever since then, I have been set on traveling around the world and immersing myself intothe many cultures each country has to offerdifferent cultures and perspectives . While solely traveling does not provide the same benefits as a job does, one being money, paired with an education in medicine and a passion for helping the less fortunate, I know I can accomplish great things. Very few people get to experience the world before they die, I plan to be an exception . At the same time I want to share my knowledge and skill to benefit underprivileged people around the world. I have always been passionate about helping others and hope to put my skills to use. No individual, regardless of age or ethnicity, should be denied proper healthcare. It is my goal to provide those services and make people smilemake the world a better place . The United States has advanced greatly in the field of medicine; however, not every country shares our benefits [I totaly do not agree with this, Canada and South America have way better healthcare systems than ours, the medicine is so cheap and regardless of citizenship healthcare is free fore everyone and the best doctors are found there] . People repeatedly take things for granted, never stopping to appreciate what they do have instead of what they don'tdo not [never use conjunctions] . Lately, people have been more obsessed with the latest iPhone or the newest computers, instead ofignoring the fact that there are children in some parts of the world dying of starvation, living without clean drinking water lacking clean water, sleeping on the streets. Most people would rather turn a blind eye to stay in a world of fantasies instead of reality . I will not let those children down, I want to be there for them and anyone else who has no one to turn to. I want to make a difference.However, I am here and with the education that Organ University will give me with my past knowledge I will make a difference by helping those kids that have nothing, not even someone to turn to.
The essay is okay it is missing what you know, be specific like how to take the heart rate or something like that. Once you find that something that you learned write about it briefly as an experience and add what you learned from it, how it will help you, and why you loved it.
Ever since I can remember I have been fascinated by the idea of exploring the great
Ever since then, I have been set on traveling around the world and immersing myself into
The essay is okay it is missing what you know, be specific like how to take the heart rate or something like that. Once you find that something that you learned write about it briefly as an experience and add what you learned from it, how it will help you, and why you loved it.
krobledo226
Aug 5, 2015
Undergraduate / Describe a conflict in your life and the skills and resources you used to resolve it. [5]
An abundance of Movies and television shows portray the father of the family to be caring, dependable, and most of all, a hero to his children. Although that seems to be the perfect reality, in reality thatdoesn't (never use conjunctions check rest of essay) . grant everyone, including myself.
Growing up, my brother treated me as any other older brother would [Yet, no matter how hard the struggles were my brother and I grew up one level above normality] . We laughed, we fought, we drove each other insane, but that's just what siblings do.
The essay format is good, but check for conjunctions. However, you did not state the prompt please insert it.
The essay format is good, but check for conjunctions. However, you did not state the prompt please insert it.
krobledo226
Jul 31, 2015
Undergraduate / My contribution to Pomona College's comes from my own life experiences. [5]
Thank you very much @MSP1998 but does it really answer the question? And do not worry I m not good with grammar or spelling I am a math person.
Thank you very much @MSP1998 but does it really answer the question? And do not worry I m not good with grammar or spelling I am a math person.
krobledo226
Jul 30, 2015
Undergraduate / My contribution to Pomona College's comes from my own life experiences. [5]
Please help with this essay, it will be the one I will use for further short answer questions including Common APP
also right if the prompt is answer and check it very rigorously
In 300 words or less, please describe how your life experiences can contribute to our educational mission around diversity.
My contribution to Pomona College's educational mission around diversity comes from my own life experiences. My connections with the common and middle-class people, immigrants, and minorities separates me from the usual teenager and since of prerogative that is usually accredited with the college bound student.
My personal experience come from my peers at high school who potentially reflect immigration problems by not being U.S citizens; the pressure comes from first-hand since I am an immigrant student as well who often tries to defend other people from discriminatory insults.
In addition, I also have family members who often try to keep up with their economic and financial status. Unfortunately, I have seen my uncles having everything to losing everything and seeing the signs of the foreclosures on their homes.
My parents came to the United States when I was only five, they suffer not just financial hardships but also discriminatory cases . There were often times, where there was nothing to eat or worst, days without eating; when I came there were times I did not eat myself while seeing the tears on my mother's face. All they had brought was a couple dollars since "pesos" are not of much worth. I came in two years later, and like my parents had no knowledge of what might come ahead or the English language. I would often see my parents cry because of our situation, and the feeling they had thinking they were failing to accomplish the American Dream.
Hearing these stories and going through the first-hand struggle make me appreciate my life since although I have had to work twice as hard as others because of my background, I appreciate those hard moments of pressure because it is those moments who make me the strong women I am today.
Please help with this essay, it will be the one I will use for further short answer questions including Common APP
also right if the prompt is answer and check it very rigorously
In 300 words or less, please describe how your life experiences can contribute to our educational mission around diversity.
My contribution to Pomona College's educational mission around diversity comes from my own life experiences. My connections with the common and middle-class people, immigrants, and minorities separates me from the usual teenager and since of prerogative that is usually accredited with the college bound student.
My personal experience come from my peers at high school who potentially reflect immigration problems by not being U.S citizens; the pressure comes from first-hand since I am an immigrant student as well who often tries to defend other people from discriminatory insults.
In addition, I also have family members who often try to keep up with their economic and financial status. Unfortunately, I have seen my uncles having everything to losing everything and seeing the signs of the foreclosures on their homes.
My parents came to the United States when I was only five, they suffer not just financial hardships but also discriminatory cases . There were often times, where there was nothing to eat or worst, days without eating; when I came there were times I did not eat myself while seeing the tears on my mother's face. All they had brought was a couple dollars since "pesos" are not of much worth. I came in two years later, and like my parents had no knowledge of what might come ahead or the English language. I would often see my parents cry because of our situation, and the feeling they had thinking they were failing to accomplish the American Dream.
Hearing these stories and going through the first-hand struggle make me appreciate my life since although I have had to work twice as hard as others because of my background, I appreciate those hard moments of pressure because it is those moments who make me the strong women I am today.
krobledo226
Jul 30, 2015
Undergraduate / Mexican and Arabian - two best friends. Diversity from a different perspective. College APP [4]
@Dawn01 Thank you very much, I meant to say Mexicali is a small town instead of Mexico. Thank you very much.. does it answer the prompt?
@Dawn01 Thank you very much, I meant to say Mexicali is a small town instead of Mexico. Thank you very much.. does it answer the prompt?
krobledo226
Jul 30, 2015
Undergraduate / Mexican and Arabian - two best friends. Diversity from a different perspective. College APP [4]
These are two essay for a programs, please help with either of the two. I plan to use this in my future college apps this year
Tell us how your own experiences and background will allow you to contribute to these conversations
The best people we ever meet, are people who are usually different from ourselves by having different qualities than ours or just at a higher level that we admire. Diversity is such an important issue and learning to understand it is essential to keep away the prejudice accusations and comments. Hearing and understanding other people, besides ourselves is a gift that should be well used by communicating with people from different cultures than ours to expand our minds, ideas, and thoughts. Looking at things from a different point of view is great because it is those moments that the most brilliant ideas emerge.
In the United States we have the opportunity to interact with people of different cultures, but it is within us to accept the offer and go on to meet new people. I myself come from Mexicali, Mexico a small state where culture and family values are extremely important. I came to the United State when I was six years old, two years after my parents. The transition from my town to Los Angeles was hard and not knowing the language made it worst. However, I overcame financial, discriminating, and bullying obstacles because of trouble that my immigrant background would give me.
Who would ever say a Mexican would be best friends with an Arabian. Two significantly different backgrounds yet very similar because of the future educational goals we have. Meeting people from different backgrounds opened up my mind from the small town girl mind that I use to have now beeing able to see things and life a different perspectives; in ways I would have not been able to in my old town. In addition, it gave me a sense of wanting to continue with an education that I thought at first would be impossible. Now not only do I want that education now but truly believe in myself because other people believe in me unlike myself and their points of view have made me a better person because I not only listen to myself but others.
These are two essay for a programs, please help with either of the two. I plan to use this in my future college apps this year
Tell us how your own experiences and background will allow you to contribute to these conversations
The best people we ever meet, are people who are usually different from ourselves by having different qualities than ours or just at a higher level that we admire. Diversity is such an important issue and learning to understand it is essential to keep away the prejudice accusations and comments. Hearing and understanding other people, besides ourselves is a gift that should be well used by communicating with people from different cultures than ours to expand our minds, ideas, and thoughts. Looking at things from a different point of view is great because it is those moments that the most brilliant ideas emerge.
In the United States we have the opportunity to interact with people of different cultures, but it is within us to accept the offer and go on to meet new people. I myself come from Mexicali, Mexico a small state where culture and family values are extremely important. I came to the United State when I was six years old, two years after my parents. The transition from my town to Los Angeles was hard and not knowing the language made it worst. However, I overcame financial, discriminating, and bullying obstacles because of trouble that my immigrant background would give me.
Who would ever say a Mexican would be best friends with an Arabian. Two significantly different backgrounds yet very similar because of the future educational goals we have. Meeting people from different backgrounds opened up my mind from the small town girl mind that I use to have now beeing able to see things and life a different perspectives; in ways I would have not been able to in my old town. In addition, it gave me a sense of wanting to continue with an education that I thought at first would be impossible. Now not only do I want that education now but truly believe in myself because other people believe in me unlike myself and their points of view have made me a better person because I not only listen to myself but others.
