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Name: Shwetanana
Joined: Aug 5, 2015
Last Post: Aug 7, 2015
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School: Birla Institute of Technology

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shwetanana   
Aug 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Patterns of woven baskets found in the immediate village of Palea - argument writing for Toefl [2]

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made by Palean people. Recently, however,archaeologist discovered such a "Palean" baskets in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea.The Brom River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans coild have crossed only by boat , and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

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Archaeologist fond Palean baskets in Lithos and they conclude that Palean baskets are not uniquely Palean. But,there may be possibility that in ancient time Palea and Lithos had business relationship. Palean baskets might sold in Lithos.

Further argument of archaeologist is that as the Brim river is deep and broad and one could cross it by boat only and they didnot found and palean boat for transportation so palean baskets is not uniquely palean. One can not deny the possibility that in past Brim river was not so broad or deep or not even exist and came into existence before sometime because of platonic movement which is occurring every second.Furthermore,even if Brim river was broad and deep there is possibility that only people of Lithos travelled for business thus archaeologist cannot found Paleian boats.

Archaeologist should provide a good argument with all the research work for proving that Palean basket is not uniquely Palean.
shwetanana   
Aug 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / "Memories help us maintain a grip on reality"; I need this to relate back to the death of a salesman [2]

My story went the same as all the rest. I was walking home from my fathers clothing store as , four men fromof my village stopped me. At first they whistled at me , thinking it was no big deal, I just continued to walk ahead, and then they stood up, closing around mecame towards me, Knowing that I couldn't defend for myself alone, I immediately started screaming as one of them grabbed me from the waist. They dragged me onto the side of the road asand they started to tear my clothes offtearing my clothes.

Over 1000 women get raped here every year, but it is yet to be acknowledged myby many, my father included. When I first told my mother she had said to me "Amira, don't ever tell your father". I didn't expect her to react that way, being at a state where I thought my life would end, she told me to keep quite. I didn't quite grasp the idea at first but I knew she was protecting me. See where I live women are objects, we cook, we clean, we birth and we keep silent all for our glorious husbands. Never had I hadthought like that because when my mother told me to keep it quite in the situation I was in, it was like a blow to my face. I was raped by four men whom I have seen before but I was told to be silent. "The offenders weren't really the offenders," she explained, " the world we live in is a man's world.

Bangladesh holds the worlds highest rape cases around the world unfortunately; I was added on to that statistic, making me another victim to a horrible attack.

You could describe me any way you like but I believe what I did was an act of bravery, for myself and all forthose women who had experienced what its like to be forced into an act which silenced them.

They got what they deserved. Silencing themTo be silence was an act of mercy upon their souls because when my body was angled for their preferences, there was no mercy.
shwetanana   
Aug 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / Technology is very helpful in solving one's problem but one can become too dependent upon using it [3]

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems,the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Everything have pros and cons.Its human job that which side we choose.Technology is very helpful in solving one's problem but at a same time it is somehow deteriorating us.

Technology gives great enhancement in our living .Now,most of the people have vacuum cleaner,dish washer etc.They give us great comfort but at a same time deteriorating our health.By doing household work we perform some exercise which helps us keeping our health good.

Technology makes one's life easier but on the other hand it is also a major factor of Green house effect. Industrial revolution is one of the greatest revolution for mankind.But machines and tools that are used in industries are causing pollution.

Increasing use of machines also brings unemployment.During 1990's,In India with the arrival of computer in workplace many people loose their job as they does not know how to operate computers.Industrialist should thought about these employee and helped them in enhancing their skills.

Technology is not only about machines and tools it is also about gun, missile,atom bomb etc.No doubt,they increase power and pride of a country but they also bring devastated condition.We all know about Hiroshima and Nagasaki.

Technology is important for us.It is crucial for human.Human is most developed species and can help in making this earth a better place to live for all everyone.We should use and rely on technology but at the same time should hear to our inner soul and use technology for the benefit of everyone.
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