Writing Feedback / Hard work keeps us determined towards our destiny, the luck alone is not enough to succeed. [2]

Toefl essays- " When people succeed, it is because of hardwork. Luck has nothing to do with success."

Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and example to explain your position.

Being successful is an important part of our lives. When we achieve success, we get satisfaction, respect and many benefits. People of all generations are looking for the ways to get success. Some people believe that when people succeed, it is because of hardwork and luck has nothing to do with success, while others disagree. In my view, hardwork is a key to success for several reasons.

The main reason is that hardwork keeps us determined towards our destiny. It prevents us from being an aimlessness, prepares us to face the challenges and provides a motivation until we achieve our goals. Through out my life, the success that I have received is the result of my hardwork. For example, when I came to the United States, I had to appear for my medical license exam. I studied most of my time by carefully planning and utilized each and every time in a proper way.This helped me to clear my doubts, increased my understandings and reinforced my knowledge. Though I came up with many challenges while I was preparing,I always stood firm in my beliefs and continuously worked hard. As a result, I passed my exam and became licensed doctor. On the other hand, my friend who was also appearing for the same exam didn't study well. She believed that luck would help her. Instead of studying she always kept on visiting temples to pray for the luck so that she can get easy questions. She was not able to get through it. Though this is an extreme example, as you can clearly see how working hard help us to get success.

The second reason is that hardwork help us to predict our success. In the procees of working hard, we work step by step which keeps us alert about problems that may come in the future and thus will hep us to save from many losses. For instance, my uncle owns a furniture bussiness. He works really hard to increase the sales and profits. Last year when he was working hard, he came to know that in future he may get some loss in his bussiness. So, he started building good relationsips with the customers and adopted some new techniques to increase the profit.Thus, even when most of the business went bad he didn't need to worry, as he had been working hard, the customers trusted on the quality of the products.This example cleary shows shows that hardwork prevents us from the failures.

In sum, people get success due to hard work. Not only people remains determined to achieve the success but it also can help to predict the chances of success in the future. We should work hard in all the sectors of our daily lives to get success.

Writing Feedback / Toefl Essays; Students can get some specific jobs only if they study science and mathematics [2]

Toefl Essays- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important for studentsto study histrory and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Education plays a significant role in our lives. It determines the level of our success. Many people believe that it is important for students to study history and literature than science and mathematics, while others disagree. In my view, studying science and mathemathics is more imporatant for several reasons.

One of the most important reasons is that it will help the students to make a better carreer. Students can get a job of doctor, engineer, nurse, scientist, mathematician and researcher only if they study science and mathematics. They can get job easily in this field. In addition, these jobs are highly paid in comparison to the jobs related to the history and literature. For example, when I was in the university in the Newyork, some of my friends had choosen to study history and literature. When they graduated they tried to search for the jobs but they found that demand of history researchers and literarure professors is very few. There are only few jobs and even to get low paid job, they had to struggle a lot. On the other hand, today I work for an Apple company which is one of the largest computer company as a software engineer. With my qualifictaions from the university, I was able to get a job in the short period of the time. Now, I have a money to buy my dream house, a luxurious car and go for exclusive vacation. This example clearly illustrates how studying science and mathematics has a powerful impact in our lives.

The other reason is that due to scientific inventions and technology developments, we use technology everywhere. our daily life requires us to use products like computers, refrigerators, medicines ,electricity which are invention of science. We perform daily proceures like fixing electricity device, using washing machines, calculate loss and profit for bussiness whcih is possible due to knowlege from the science and technology. We will be able to use these inventions easily only if we have detailed knowledge about science nad mathematics. For instance, I am able to predict about my business by calculating from the formula that I had learned from mathematics. Also, my daily activities like fixing any electric instruments, proper use of washing machines and computers are possible due to my knowledge in science. As you can clearly see, how our gained knowlegde about science and mathematics help us to do our activities smoothly and successfully.

In sum, it is important for students to study science amd mathematics. Not only it will enable them to choose better career which can lead to the success but they can also use the daily machinery items much more easily. So, all school should build their curriculum giving more focus to the science and mathematics so that studentts can study science and mathematics more than history and literature.