Graduate / I am applying for a master degree scholarship and I need to write a self introduction. [18]

I will be fixing this problems!

I have one doubt, Back in Canada I started a relatinship with a korean girl, and this relationship lasts until now.

Would be interesting to mention that in my essay? that I have a korean girlfriend.

once again,

Thanks a lot

Graduate / I am applying for a master degree scholarship and I need to write a self introduction. [18]


THere is no limit of words, my self introduction should be within a page though.
I have split out the first paragraph into 3. look at what I have got so far:

My entire life, I always had a passion for math and computers. Since high school my professional field always was clear for me, I have always wanted to become a computer scientist and create new technological solutions. In fact, I spent big part of my youth in front of a computer, learning how to code; however, I do not regret about it whatsoever; on the contrary, this premature curiosity enabled me to start working really soon.

My first important achievement was in 2010 when I got the 2nd best score among hundreds of candidates to enter in the university. Since the beginning of my undergrad studies I stayed in touch with professors and their research works. This awoke in me the interest for software development and intelligent IT solutions. When I was 19-years-old, I had an internship using the programming language PHP through the university I attended. At the age of twenty, I have started to work as a software developer at QAT Global, an American company with headquarters located in Brazi. As we followed the Scrum development methodology we used to have daily meeting with our customers, therefore my English skills was indispensable. Those early professional contacts were valuable experiences to my professional development because I could feel that I have chosen the right career for me.

Although I started to work as a software developer and analyst really soon, I always dedicated in my academic background. As instance, in order to expand my degree in System analysis and development I applied for the program science without border (Cięncias sem fronteiras), where the best Brazilian students and researchers are selected by the government to complete part of their under graduation studies abroad. In consequence of my academic performance and my English I was among those students, and then I went to Toronto for one year and seven months to study at Seneca.

Thank you a lot in advance.

I hope I have been improving!

Is it ok?

Graduate / I am applying for a master degree scholarship and I need to write a self introduction. [18]

- my degree name is analysis and system development , and i have been working as a software developer analyst.
- Yes, the brazilian government selects the best students to go abroad and improve their undergraduations
sorry, but I could not see where i could state that I was always dedicated to receiving an advance degree.

Thank you soo much for your attention. btw, I fixed the errors that you've pointed

It's helped me a lot

Graduate / I am applying for a master degree scholarship and I need to write a self introduction. [18]

Justivy03,

Thank you so much...

you are not late whatsoever!

In fact, I still have more than one month to prepare my essay; However, I started early in order to make it as perfect as possible.

.. I will edit my essay, and post it here later!

Graduate / I am applying for a master degree scholarship and I need to write a self introduction. [18]

once again, thank you!!

I will be working on it over the weekend. When I finish it I will post here..

Have a great night.

Graduate / I am applying for a master degree scholarship and I need to write a self introduction. [18]

First thank you for attention .


I think that I should mention my abroad experience. Maybe introduction is not the right place to do so, but I believe it is good to show that I have met people from different cultural backgrounds, isnt it?

I am really thank you for you help, I feel more confident with your idea and the previous one.

i look forward to hearing your ideas.

thanks.

Graduate / I am applying for a master degree scholarship and I need to write a self introduction. [18]

4th sentence: Do you mean despite your young age, you already have job experience in this field?
5th sentence: Place a comma after "development". Did you take the course or did you "major" in computer programming and analysis? If this was

- Yes, despite my young age, I already a good job experience.
- I attended only 3 semester as an exchange student, it was a program to improve our graduation in Brazil.

thank you so much for your attention. My introduction looks quite better.