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Name: Tong Nguyen Ha My
Joined: Sep 24, 2015
Last Post: Sep 27, 2015
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LuckyLulu   
Sep 27, 2015
Scholarship / Mission 2025, I'm part of the crew on space - UWC Scholarship [9]

Thanks for all the correction, justivy. Your suggestions could really help fix my bad grammar!
I recently consider all vangiespen's useful recommendations. As I realize my interest is in Nature as well as inspring other people to preserve it as well, I came up with this essay. Hope you can help review it!

" The day of 29th April start with a fresh breath of air. A morning like this is more than perfect. The sun is shining more brightly than ever and the sky is clear. That sounds like a good start for me and my student's excursion to Nam Cat Tien National Park. We take a bus and start the journey. The kids seem excited. They keep talking and laughing all the way, then from time to time stand up from their seat asking me: "Are we there yet?"

I smile and tell them to be patient. I understand their exhilaration, this is the first time they've travelled so far from their usual studying environment. I myself am eager to arrive there as well, to show them how wonderful nature can be, and see if our program can inspire these young generations to immerse themselves in the healthy atmosphere of the forests, and to preserve its beauty.

"What is our program?" You may wonder. Well, it is called "Shaping the Earth", an educational program, of which I'm the founder, which help increase children and teenager' awareness about the environment from an early age. We provide these young with not only academic knowledge and tools for experiments, but also real experience in nature via short trips or excursion. We aim at changing citizen's attitude towards nature, clarifying not only its significance and problems, but also ways to preserve it. Therefore, this progam will not only minimize our harmful activities to nature but also restore its beauty.

We finally arrive at our destination. I lead the students through the forests, introducing to them each and every tree. Their eyes light up with amazement, which gives me the satisfaction influencing a new generation. I show them not only the beauty of nature, but also the fact that these are being destroyed and soon will be gone. After the trip, one small student hold my and hands and say to me: I want to invent a kind of ink that will turn our drawings into green grass. I am glad to hear her will. One thing our program is trying reach is to be able to fund great ideas of improve environmental problems to become a reality, and by the time we achieve this goal, we will be able to make brilliant ideas like hers come true.

At the end of the day, we go home, gladly and satisfyingly. The kids keep talking about what they have learned, and I keep thinking about how the small things they learn to day will help them create a better world in the future.

What a day to enjoy!:
LuckyLulu   
Sep 25, 2015
Scholarship / Mission 2025, I'm part of the crew on space - UWC Scholarship [9]

Thank you all a lot for the recommendations. One thing keeps me worried is that I haven't really determined on any particular carreer. What I do know is that I'm keen on exploring nature al well as helping to preserve and restore its natural beauty. Hope I can find something to write on that. I'll try vangiespen's guides and see how it goes. Hope you can help me correct it again!
LuckyLulu   
Sep 24, 2015
Scholarship / Mission 2025, I'm part of the crew on space - UWC Scholarship [9]

In order to apply for the UWC Scholarship, I have written an essay about the following topic:
"Describe how your day goes on April 29th 2025"
Though I put lots of effort on it, I'm confused whether my essay has met up with the necessary criteria and also, whether it is grammartically correct. So I would really be thankful if any of you can give me some reviews and advices.

Here is my essay:

"The sound the 3-dimension clock wakes me up. It says 0:01, which means a new day has dawned. Here comes the day of 29th April 2025.

The sense of time reminds me of beautiful Earth, which has been more than out of reach. Though a year from home makes me eager to come back, this is not the time to quit. For the sake of the Earth, my whole crew is determined to keep this journey going on until we finish our missions.

As we go further, the density of dust keeps increasing which pretty much resemble the chaos back at our home planet. People are now starting to abandon their home and build cities underground. Wars and nuclear power have sure paid high cost. The recall of how splendid the Earth used to be and could have been arouse the feeling of sheer bitterness. Nonetheless, there is no use crying over spilt milk. Future awaits. And we bear the heavy responsible to be one of those reassuring the hope for that forthcoming. Hopeless though it may seem, we won't back down.

The space shuttle slowly moves into an area of intense heat. This alarms me. On checking the detector, David - a crew member, discover that there is a range of asteroids orbiting huge planet that is releasing excessive heat waves, which we are quite close to. Could this be? Whatever it is, we decide not give it a miss. Hanate quickly send a report back to Earth asking for a precise location. We breathlessly approach the system.

To our amazement, we are observing a second Solar System. It's like a home from home! We all stand up watching it in awe. The hope keeps raising as we come closer to the third planet from "the Sun". The ground controllers help us set the teleport to explore "the brother of Earth". Soon after five minutes, we are on solid ground. The beautiful green grass appears join the crystal blue sky in the horizon. I take off my space helmet, happily take in a deep breath and report back to Earth: "We found it!"

Thank you in advance!
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