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Name: Dharu Smaradhana
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lldharu   
Oct 13, 2015
Writing Feedback / Social Life in Apartment Buildings - IELTS Writing Task 2 [6]

Hi . .
Honestly, you have abundant lexical resources, I mean vocabulary. But in IELTS Writing Task 2 the important thing is not only that but also task achievement and Coherent, Cohesion.

your grammatical range and accuracy also should be taken into account.

Despite, it cannot be used to full sentence. Despite + noun. In spite of + of + noun
if you wanna show full sentence you should use although, even though, etc
It is crucial mistake because you write in first sentence and it will be first impression.

Your coherent and cohesion also, it is not as easy as using moreover, in addition, etc
you should show coherent sentence such as this, this case, etc to avoid repetition.
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