Writing Feedback / People should be judged by employers accordind to their skills, not gender [3]

You could tell what your profession is in the second paragraph. Also, there is no word such as afraided.

Writing Feedback / Name a world leader you think is important. It is a part of Toefl IBT exam. [3]

Some improvements required. Like "religious" to " religion". " World leadership" to "world leader". " Islam means peace" only truncate "the".